Ficlet: Echoes

[triquetralmoon]

Title: Echoes

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Comments

[kalliel]

I love the tense, stilted atmosphere to this. The idea that there is something wrong, and it's obvious, yet not only does it remain unspoken, it's as though it cannot be spoken. The symmetry of the piece itself only reinforces that feeling. Great job!

[triquetralmoon]

Thank you!

I wanted it to have that effect, to build the foreboding that seems like might get built on the show. (Please, oh, please, oh, please, Carver! Work your magic!)

[borgmama1of5]

This is not good. Not what you wrote--that is perfectly in character. Just the development makes me apprehensive...

[triquetralmoon]

Well, I was definitely going for apprehension, so there ya go! :)

Thanks for reading!

[embroiderama]

I love this, especially those last few lines.

[triquetralmoon]

Thank you!

I'm hoping those last few lines just add to the foreboding from the show!