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[tru7h_serum]

I woke up stiff and sore, with a very uncomfortable cramp in the middle of my spine. I was cold, hungry, and damp, and I had no fucking idea where I was. It was in the middle of the afternoon, judging by the position of the twin suns in the sky; they were almost overlapped. I stood up, grumbling and putting a hand to my aching forehead only to find

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Sheesh.

[vale_of_plenty]

Well, ABOUT FUCKING TIME. Sorry I never commented on the first two--just gonna combine everything here, okay?

Annyway. I *WORSHIP* how you write first person(envyenvy). Perfect mix of thoughts and action. I love Xirtrian's snide little comments, and how much personality is conveyed through simple one-liners and timing ("Nice shot. Damn." when any normal person would be freaking out, etc.). The little government/society/space pirate blurb is also interesting--you gonna switch to Shantie's upper-class!perspective and show her throughts on it, or has that dropped?

One thing I'm a little confused about, though--he's not seven in Earth years, right (if he's just a smart kid [OMG ENDERPLAGERISM!], ignore me, please...)? I know the "too young for a job" thing was there, but that could be anywhere from earth-seven to earth-fifteen.

And hurry up with the "post more later" thing.

Re: Sheesh.

[tru7h_serum]

Well he's roughly earth-seven, yes. More like eight and a couple months in earth years, give or take. He IS a genius, you know. >:p

And yeah, I'm gonna swap to Shantala throughout the book once I get there, so don't worry. ;)