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Fic: Worthy of Your Soul 8/WIP

Sep 15, 2006 12:39

Title: Worthy of Your Soul 8/WIP

Author: trust_n0_1
Rating: PG13
Summary: Hephaistion is asked by Philip to spy on Alexander and finds himself between a rock and a hard place.
Copyright: © Trust No One August 2006
A/N: Heartfelt thanks to my Beta Fiona, whose superb skills have helped shape this story.

( Worthy of Your Soul 8/WIP )

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Comments 33

qaddafi September 15 2006, 11:42:54 UTC

Alexander'll have to wait a few more years to chop up Cleitus.

Anyway, I like it, and I'm still waiting for the smut.

trust_n0_1 September 19 2006, 06:59:34 UTC

Gosh, you're putting pressure on me and I've told you before that I'm hopeless with writing smut. How about you write it for me?
But I am very glad that you are still enjoying it and I'm waiting for more of your story too.

LOL petarpan October 6 2006, 12:38:10 UTC

Maybe you could ask HPGryffin to help you add some smut d;o)
Or Myr)

winterqueen September 15 2006, 18:16:18 UTC

Intriguing - I love how Alexander calculates his words when he is answering Hephaestion, mmmm and the relief when he realises Hephaestion hasn't been unfaithful :)

trust_n0_1 September 19 2006, 07:00:32 UTC

He's a calculating little cat, isn't he? After all, he's lived with the likes of Philip and Olympias his whole life and mistrust comes naturally.
Thanks, darling :)

clexlover September 16 2006, 00:16:07 UTC

A wonderful update. I love the talk and banter between Heph and Cleitas and the respect shown between them. It was also great to see Alexander jealousy and how he questioned his past behaviour. I am glad that the secrets are out and that Alexander is aware of what is going on.
I love Heph's courage and determination and I hope the mission is a success.

BTW, this update took way too long...I hope that the next one is much quicker...O.K. :)

I am glad that you are well. Have a good weekend.

trust_n0_1 September 19 2006, 07:01:40 UTC

Glad you enjoyed this episode, it was probably the hardest to write of the whole story. I will absolutely try to update quicker next time. I know that blaming it on RL is no excuse *sighs*

coraldawn September 16 2006, 05:35:35 UTC

Great chapter! I really love conversation as a way of advancing the story and highlighting dramatic moments - and you have done it masterfully here. I also liked how matter-of-factly A and H "made up" after all those weeks of angst and acknowledged in clear words their own fears and secrets - a very "boyish" thing to do. And I have to echo Qaddafi - Alexander's desire to cleave Cleitus in two slyly echoes the future when he did!

Waiting for their adventures in the Peloponnese in the next chapter - or whatever else you have in store for us.

trust_n0_1 September 19 2006, 07:04:21 UTC

It was difficult to decide how these two would make up. The air is not 100% clear between them, and I hope that has come across. In a way it's good to play with teen characters, because they react so unlike adults. I've been worried about the staticu structure of the story, abt too much dialogue and not too much action, something that I am trying to remedy.
Thanks a million for your comments!

From Moon - wonderful!!! anonymous September 16 2006, 06:42:58 UTC

Hello! From one writer to another I have to salute you - you've achieved the best result the best way. What I mean is, you got Alexander and Hephaestion into an extremely complicated situation, and your deeply thinking, deeply worrying, hesitant Alexander has shown that for them simply to kiss and make up after, for example, Hephaestion is at death's door from fever or risking his neck for Philip would not be the answer. So instead of entering the land of cliches you've let Alexander THINK his way out of his "snarl", admit his mistakes and understand Hephaestion's without a huge dose of angst - which, frankly, I don't agree teenage boys would indulge in! Ever since I suggested you not let them make up too quickly, I myself began to wonder how you would get them out of it! And I didn't come up with any solutions as logical and elegant as this. In fact I only came up with one, and it was very thin, so once again I have to salute you ( ... )

Re: From Moon - wonderful!!! trust_n0_1 September 19 2006, 07:09:53 UTC

Oh, Moon, the fact that this hasn't disappointed you means so much to me. You (i>would tell me if it was not to your standards, I hope! I am very curious as to what solution you came up with for this dilema, not for a moment do I believe that it's thin.
Awww, did I make you feel guilty (mwahaha!!!) - so NOT sorry as well.*g*