Tell me what you think

[tryin2makeit]

I was looking at something I wrote about a year ago. It was strange because it brought tears to my eyes. The poem is called Fly Away. It is a son talking to his father about the things that go on in the world. Tell me if you like it or not

Comments

[am4z1ng]

Hm I like it, because it is creative. The whole dialogue thing is very interesting. Very focused on rhyme, which isn't a bad thing--I bet you could have written a lot more...i tried once writing a few lines down, then coming back and putting a few more, then coming back with a few more..you'd be surprised how much you can write