they should be your favorites. because they're mine too. and omg, idk if i want to write a sequel to this with butthurt spencer and brendon's parents' reactions. and maybe jon's parents' reactions.
that was honestly one of the BEST that I have ever read. It was such a perfect mix of everything I love. and Brendon's parents are the coolest, scaries things since....idk, like, Halloween was invented or something. it was just..... lskjfosdijfld x 934794374 like, that much love <3 I swear, everytime it rains, I will think about this (and jsyk, its supposed to rain here all week)
Hmm, this could have been better, I think. Like, the writing was decent, you could tell a story which was good. The plot was funny and such, but it was the story that has some problems. There were parts that felt very watery and thin. And like, all the crying? You have to remember that these are BOYS and they don't just cry because someone said, "no." They get angry and sad, no doubt, but they're not going to sprout a river of tears. Thus, it felt unrealistic. Then the cutting? THAT was plain annoying. It made the Brendon character sound more like a fucking baby then a sexy sixteen year old. I don't know, it could have been made more genuine. The complications didn't have to be made like a soap opera, either.
=\ I see what you're saying, but the Brendon in this story is over-reactive and sensitive beyond belief. I think Jon only cried once throughout the whole thing. Sorry you found the cutting annoying. Was it because it was just kinda like... oh drama, let's throw in some angst, too? Cutting is something I had trouble with, so I slipped it in as a method of getting over it.
Usually when you have a character like Brendon, you have to make that more clearer so that the plot can go along with that. You tried to write brendon as over-reactive and sensitive. I saw him as an annoying and dramatic and stupid. Honestly, the cutting thing seemed very random and it didn't seem to go along with the character you were trying to represent.
(note: you know what I love about SATD? You give someone concrit, and there never like, FUCK YOU! :])
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Oh my god, so, so cute.
Stupid Jon and emo douche bag Brendon are totally my new favourites.
Awesome, totally awesome. <33
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and maybe jon's parents' reactions.
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YAY!
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perfection darling.
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and Brendon's parents are the coolest, scaries things since....idk, like, Halloween was invented or something.
it was just..... lskjfosdijfld x 934794374
like, that much love <3
I swear, everytime it rains, I will think about this (and jsyk, its supposed to rain here all week)
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(note: you know what I love about SATD? You give someone concrit, and there never like, FUCK YOU! :])
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(note: it makes you feel a lot more comfortable about giving concrit. it's great! :D)
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