Well...
Oh hey guys! Been a while since I posted. Don't throw rocks at me please. And don't melt metal too. Or rather, don't melt ANYTHING.
Anyways, I would like to tell you a story. And some LOLZ too.
I found an old journal of mine a while ago, and it dated back late 2008. The journal was actually my birthday present. I opened the notes and laughed out loud. Those were outdated information about Tsubasa's current arcs and character profiles, really. I laughed.
Also, it has some Persona 3 stories (more of a re-telling) that I wrote down. You do NOT know how my writing and narrating is soooooo bad. Not really bad, but I don't know how to write a story on paper, but I KNOW how to write a story. Only that I can't put it down.
Here's what I wrote on the first freakin' chapter I made in the journal (and for the lolz of many people). You could skip this part and on to my observation on writing a re-telling.
Persona 3 story: Part 1 "Orpheus Awakens"
A boy who has blue hair, blue eyes, always had a portable player has no recall of what happen, his parents died ten years ago. While walking through the dorm he saw a mysterious boy who wanted you to be signing a contract. You signed your name: Minato Arisato. Then the backgrounds change and instead of the boy, he saw a girl name Mitsuru and a girl with a pink clothes happen to be holding a gun. Mitsuru told her he just wanted to live there. The girl with a gun is named "Yukari".
And next morning, Yukari was knocking at the door to lead YOU at school. She warne you not to tell what happened last night.
They took a ride in the monorail and walk together in the school. He is a transfer student in the school. Then after class, there is a boy with a cap, came and talk to him. Saying: "Hey, are you the one with Yukari?"
He introduced himself. "I am Junpei." And he questioned, "do you have a relationship with her?" You nodded no. Then Yukari went into the class room. "Junpei, what are you doing?" He said nothing and Yukari said, "Did you tell him what happened?" You nodded no. And Yukari warned "Don't tell what happened last night."
Junpei was shock "last night?" And Yukari said "It's not what you think!" And before Yukari left she said. "And don't start any rumors about me."
On the next day, on night, Mitsuru and Yukari and the chairman observed him, while sleeping. Then the "dark hour" is approaching. Then in his dream he was sitting in a chair and infront of him is an old man with long nose and a girl with yellow eyes. It looks like you are in the elevator. They gave you a key. It says "velvet room". Then on the next day, at night of the full moon, at the secret head quarters (meeting room) Akihiko came back with a shadow! The whole dormitory is shaking Yukari woke him, and ran to the back door. But Mitsuru-senpai said there is more than one enemy! Then they went to the top floor roof and lock the door. But suddenly, Shadows climbed at the top of the roof, Yukari took her gun, pointed it to her head, But had difficulties to trigger the switch but the shadow attacked first and the Evoker (gun) was dropped then he picked up the gun and he pointed it to his head. He doesn't trigger it but he hesitate a little and quietly said "Persona" then triggered the switch! Crystal comes out of the other side of his head, and came out something, something like persona it fought all the shadows in the roof. after that, Yukari was surprise he has one, but he fainted.
Continue...Part 2...
After typing this, you do not know how much fail this has.
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Now where am I? Oh right. Ahem. Time for analysis and lolz!!
Just quick notes: you might noticed some underlined words and un-capitalized words, and other mispelled junks you saw...well, that was written in the journal, so I don't want anything edited. I want the original to be represented to you for the laughs.
Now did you noticed that the POV changes a lot in Third Person View to Second Person View?
Lolz
Fail observation, drama writing and really straight to the point or some other junk like that?
Lolz
"On the next day, on night, Mitsuru and Yukari and the chairman observed him, while sleeping."
This is probably the sentence that made me want to eat zebras. Those who played Persona will laugh their asses off.
And there are a lot of things that I found but did not dare to point it out. Worse case scenario, there IS Part 2 and Part 3! But I stopped at that point when my journal is full THANK GAWD. But much worst...I started out my own novelization of the game with an expensive notebook, which was ten-times more the lolz. Actually, I stopped at Chapter 6, at the point of Shirakawa Boulevard, because the notebook is full.
I still have that notebook and it's in the shelves...unfortunately it turned into a scrappy scrapbook with cut out anime pictures from boxes blocking the pages, paragraphs, and others, and with the smell of glue and toothpaste.
If I have a digital camera, I could picture it out for you.
Now, you have witnessed by handwriting of Late 2008 and Early 2009! Reminds of My Immortal Fanfiction...
Also, if I have the time, I could post out Chapter 2 and 3 of the Old Persona 3 retelling I have in my Journal.
Now off the Persona stories.
Venturing a little bit more in the journal has some useful stuff too, like a list of Personas from the protagonists initial and final personas, listed arcanas of the tarot cards, quick reminders and stickers I used to collect!
Phew...that is all for today. xD
Anyways, I would like to tell you a story. And some LOLZ too.
I found an old journal of mine a while ago, and it dated back late 2008. The journal was actually my birthday present. I opened the notes and laughed out loud. Those were outdated information about Tsubasa's current arcs and character profiles, really. I laughed.
Also, it has some Persona 3 stories (more of a re-telling) that I wrote down. You do NOT know how my writing and narrating is soooooo bad. Not really bad, but I don't know how to write a story on paper, but I KNOW how to write a story. Only that I can't put it down.
Here's what I wrote on the first freakin' chapter I made in the journal (and for the lolz of many people). You could skip this part and on to my observation on writing a re-telling.
Persona 3 story: Part 1 "Orpheus Awakens"
A boy who has blue hair, blue eyes, always had a portable player has no recall of what happen, his parents died ten years ago. While walking through the dorm he saw a mysterious boy who wanted you to be signing a contract. You signed your name: Minato Arisato. Then the backgrounds change and instead of the boy, he saw a girl name Mitsuru and a girl with a pink clothes happen to be holding a gun. Mitsuru told her he just wanted to live there. The girl with a gun is named "Yukari".
And next morning, Yukari was knocking at the door to lead YOU at school. She warne you not to tell what happened last night.
They took a ride in the monorail and walk together in the school. He is a transfer student in the school. Then after class, there is a boy with a cap, came and talk to him. Saying: "Hey, are you the one with Yukari?"
He introduced himself. "I am Junpei." And he questioned, "do you have a relationship with her?" You nodded no. Then Yukari went into the class room. "Junpei, what are you doing?" He said nothing and Yukari said, "Did you tell him what happened?" You nodded no. And Yukari warned "Don't tell what happened last night."
Junpei was shock "last night?" And Yukari said "It's not what you think!" And before Yukari left she said. "And don't start any rumors about me."
On the next day, on night, Mitsuru and Yukari and the chairman observed him, while sleeping. Then the "dark hour" is approaching. Then in his dream he was sitting in a chair and infront of him is an old man with long nose and a girl with yellow eyes. It looks like you are in the elevator. They gave you a key. It says "velvet room". Then on the next day, at night of the full moon, at the secret head quarters (meeting room) Akihiko came back with a shadow! The whole dormitory is shaking Yukari woke him, and ran to the back door. But Mitsuru-senpai said there is more than one enemy! Then they went to the top floor roof and lock the door. But suddenly, Shadows climbed at the top of the roof, Yukari took her gun, pointed it to her head, But had difficulties to trigger the switch but the shadow attacked first and the Evoker (gun) was dropped then he picked up the gun and he pointed it to his head. He doesn't trigger it but he hesitate a little and quietly said "Persona" then triggered the switch! Crystal comes out of the other side of his head, and came out something, something like persona it fought all the shadows in the roof. after that, Yukari was surprise he has one, but he fainted.
Continue...Part 2...
After typing this, you do not know how much fail this has.
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
-headdesk-
Now where am I? Oh right. Ahem. Time for analysis and lolz!!
Just quick notes: you might noticed some underlined words and un-capitalized words, and other mispelled junks you saw...well, that was written in the journal, so I don't want anything edited. I want the original to be represented to you for the laughs.
Now did you noticed that the POV changes a lot in Third Person View to Second Person View?
Lolz
Fail observation, drama writing and really straight to the point or some other junk like that?
Lolz
"On the next day, on night, Mitsuru and Yukari and the chairman observed him, while sleeping."
This is probably the sentence that made me want to eat zebras. Those who played Persona will laugh their asses off.
And there are a lot of things that I found but did not dare to point it out. Worse case scenario, there IS Part 2 and Part 3! But I stopped at that point when my journal is full THANK GAWD. But much worst...I started out my own novelization of the game with an expensive notebook, which was ten-times more the lolz. Actually, I stopped at Chapter 6, at the point of Shirakawa Boulevard, because the notebook is full.
I still have that notebook and it's in the shelves...unfortunately it turned into a scrappy scrapbook with cut out anime pictures from boxes blocking the pages, paragraphs, and others, and with the smell of glue and toothpaste.
If I have a digital camera, I could picture it out for you.
Now, you have witnessed by handwriting of Late 2008 and Early 2009! Reminds of My Immortal Fanfiction...
Also, if I have the time, I could post out Chapter 2 and 3 of the Old Persona 3 retelling I have in my Journal.
Now off the Persona stories.
Venturing a little bit more in the journal has some useful stuff too, like a list of Personas from the protagonists initial and final personas, listed arcanas of the tarot cards, quick reminders and stickers I used to collect!
Phew...that is all for today. xD