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[tsunku]

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[heartilly]

I THINK IT'S GOOD. You should just BS it more, that always helps. Like .. Add words such as "therefore, furthermore, because of this" .. Get me? XD

[tsunku]

LOL.... we get in trouble for that in my class. ._.;

[heartilly]

.. Dang nabbit.

[terio]

the 'yes, yes' part at the start of the 3rd last sentence is odd. but its pretty good. :3

i was never good at writting papers. i snuck by english classes when i was in school.

what is your paper on? well..i dont know anything about writing papers and such..so i will go now. :3

[tsunku]

It`s on the Study of Psychology and Criminal Psychology and whatnot... ^_^;

[flowering]

It sounds pretty good. If I may suggest, I might reword the first sentence a bit because it's a little hard to understand, and instead of the "yes, yes," I would replace it with "though it is often thought that" or "though many people may think that," as the former sounds too much like you're trying to chat with your teacher. Also, I'd put a comma between "fierce" and "unhappy".

Otherwise, I think you did well. I like your thesis too.

[tsunku]

*laughs* Yeah. I was just being an as with the 'yes, yes' part and kept telling myself "Max.." Cause that`s what I call myself, i say "max, you really should change that... you`re gonna fail, buddy. O_o"

And thank you. ^^;

[tsunku]

I was just being an as with the 'yes, yes' part and...

...as ? Yes. or ass.