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turkeyish

The Traveller

Feb 21, 2009 22:38

The Traveller
After that last journey with Caspian, Edmund's never really the same again.

( The terms pass unobtrusively, and Edmund continues to slip away. )

-fic: ficlets, -fic: challenges, -character: edmund pevensie, *fandom: narnia

Comments 6

caramelsilver February 22 2009, 20:59:42 UTC

Wow, I really like it! I'm a sucker for outsider pov's and this puts Edmund in a nice light I think. I do think he would be the quiet type and really, the loss of Narnia would be bloody hard on them. I also, for some reason, like that you made him a smoker. It fits him somehow=)

turkeyish February 22 2009, 22:54:04 UTC

I do like my characters best when they've got a cigarette in their hands, haha. Thank you so much for reading, I'm glad you like it!

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turkeyish February 22 2009, 22:52:56 UTC

Oh, I know! Guys smoking in real life doesn't do anything for me, but Edmund Pevensie with a cigarette in his hand? Rawr.

illusaria February 24 2009, 18:31:48 UTC

This was beautiful - I love your characterization of Edmund. He comes off as brooding, but not the annoying sort of brooding, if that makes sense. The sexy kind of brooding Okay, I'm going to stop now. That bit about him acting like a king and scaring the bullies with his quiet, adult gravity was perfect.

Now I'm going to say something I'm rather scared to. A piece I just wrote (and incidentally, just posted) has an ending that looks almost like this one's. :| After posting it I decided to take a peek at your newest story - saw it on justkingedmund and then... yes. I mean, I think both stories come off with very different messages and all, but the ending. :| I hope it's all right with you.

Anyway, I loved this - it was one of my favorites of yours (though I have yet to read all the stories you've posted!) - although I don't condone Edmund smoking. Tsk tsk. But you write him so elegantly with a cigarette between his fingers that I forgive him.

Lovely. And please forgive any grammatical errors - I'm so, so sleepy.

turkeyish February 25 2009, 03:37:53 UTC

It's okay, I was totally aiming for the sexy kind of brooding. Cough. Glad to know it worked!

And oh, no worries at all! I don't care about stuff like that. I can't wait to read your story, yay.

Haha, sorry - I can't help but turn my characters into smokers at some point or another. A guilty pleasure of sorts, though I'm not a huge fan of it in real life. How odd.

Anyway, thanks so much for your comment! :)

muselives April 27 2009, 20:11:31 UTC

Your mature!Edmund is really a fantastic character to read. I don't think I'd ever get tired of it.