and so i swing, and i sway

[tutie_flutie]

so, this needs little telling but:
this livejournal is for all intensive purposes, dead.

but i kind of want to post this to see if anyone will read it.
i've kind worked on it a bit,

and it's not nearly done, but here it is any way, the first couple of pages.

fortify me;

i’m asking nicely as we sit by the curb.

we toss the rounded, flat

Comments

fabulous

[justhebeginning]

I want to read this story when you finish it, or even as it's progressing. You have my attention.

I'm gunna say "sandburg" is "galesburg" the bakery is Uncle Billy's.Co-po

I love how you paint the picture: "his hair like unstirred coffee and eyes that seemed to be so afraid of damaging anything they happen to see" Ugh, fabulous!

I have a ?- when you switch fonts/narrorators- the second time the boy "speaks" you have it in 3rd person, while the 1st time was in first person- intentional? May want to check that.

Keep writing - i feel like my 2nd grade teacher..
*smily face sticker*

[julia_so_called]

you have audiance appeal on many different degrees, you know.

don't take this as something meant to flatter you--i speak from jealousy, honestly. And it is truth, also. So if it does flatter you, good. it should. Only if you want it too, that is. if it doesn't, then that's still okay. The truth hurts sometimes.

i know i'm on a diet, but may i have seconds, mum?

love

[fraulin_scumbag]

Shut up and keep writing you whore.

[raspberryliquor]

ooooohhhh, ivy, i love it!

i hope they find each other in the end.

wanna hang out this week? you + me + downtown = fun, yes? fo' sho'.

seriously, i do want more of this story.

kisses!