FF: Sunshine After Rain (1/1)

[aerial312]

Title: Sunshine After Rain
Author: Aerial312
Rating: PG-13
Characters/Pairings: Alice/Jasper
Table/Prompt: Epsilon/Hug
Word Count: 1, 504
Summary: The day after they meet, Alice learns of Jasper's dislike for the sun.
Timeline: Pre-Twlight, before they join the Cullens.

Comments

[tablelands]

Lovely story as usual. I particularly like the way you handle Alice’s visions and the way they effect the interactions with Jasper.

[sirenprincess]

I know I'm late in reading this one, and I soooo wish I'd had to time to read it earlier. I'm sending you the beta via e-mail, but I had to comment here too.

I LOVE LOVE LOVE this one. I can't decide which of yours is my favorite. Probably "Happiness" followed by "To Be Tempted" but this one is definitely top three. I really, really liked it, and I've been running through it in my head for two days now. It's just perfect!

I LOVE the concept of Jasper being afraid of sunlight. My Jasper agrees with the notion and says he very well might be. I love the way you described Jasper's body language. It made my heart clench.

But by FAR my favorite part was

"They stand out more in the sun…it used to be a punishment…I don't really want to talk about it. That…that is my issue with the sun."OMG I love you for giving me that!!!! Of course, you know my Maria and my version of Jasper. So this fits perfectly. But my brain is demanding to know more!!!! You can't just leave it at that. Comment and let me know more details of what you

[aerial312]

Ooh, I'm so happy you liked this one so much. I was really pleased with how this one had come out.

My thought on the punishment was that it was more of a public humiliation thing. Along the lines of being forced to stand bare chested in the sunlight in front of all the newborns with Maria pointing out all the imperfections. I hadn't really thought about being forced to look at them himself. But I definitely think that a large part of it was being forced to feel the revulsion of others as they viewed his scars in the sunlight. Alice finds them beautiful. It helps me explain how, within a week in my timeline, Jasper is comfortable enough to lie in the sun with Alice in a clearing. Tender Leaves, the first sex one, is set a week after they meet...and he's laying in the sun...sometimes I need to back track to explain things that I've glossed over before. I had to do the same thing with Happiness and her touching his scars.

[sirenprincess]

That was my second thought, like in "In Her Power" when Jasper has to strip his shirt off, just taking it further. I could totally, totally, totally see Maria doing this. And it would be awful for Jasper. I'm sure all of the newborns found him revolting, and Jasper was forced to feel that over and over again. Poor, poor Jazz. Alice is the first and only one who's not disgusted by him. So what did Jasper do to deserve these punishments from Maria?

I really like your explanation. I think I like the story even more now :-)

[aerial312]

I hadn't really thought about what exactly he did to deserve those punishments. My development of Jasper's past with Maria has definitely been on an "as needed" basis. I really think through the things that relate to situations that come up with Alice, but stuff besides that I find I just kind of gloss over. Especially because I write from Alice's POV, and they aren't things he's likely to want to talk about, particularly in this early phase of their relationship that I like to write so much.