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Sep 13, 2009 14:07

electricity and homicidal tendencies - prompts
Fandom: Heroes
Characters: Sylar/Elle
Rating: MMMMMM.
Table: here
Disclaimer: I do not own anything.
Summary: Two drabbles for the prompt table. No particular connection between them.

( Wants to eat her alive, make her scream for him, and take in all of her so maybe he’ll be whole, maybe the divide stuttering the clock inside will fix itself. )

sylar/elle, heroes, !fanfic, !prompts

Comments 10

disalae September 13 2009, 19:01:38 UTC

These were great - very bittersweet and sad. I really liked the last line in #23, it gives an interesting visual (not literal per se, but a visualization of her internal state I guess). It's also sort of infantile, I think, which works well with her as a character who never really had a childhood.

And I know you said there's no relation, but I honestly thought when it said her neck was bruised and blue, I knew she wasn't dead but it gave that sort of feeling to the scene (not in a creepy way, mind you) and then she said in the next one she is a walking corpse. I liked it even if it wasn't intentional.

petitebelette September 13 2009, 21:45:57 UTC

Thank you so much. :D I love finding little "infantile" touches like that for Elle; it was definitely intentional. Yay, someone noticed. I'm so glad you thought it worked!

Oh wow, I didn't even see that, but I definitely do now! Haha, I like it. It adds more ~depth.

dela26 September 13 2009, 20:08:06 UTC

oh, i loved both of these so much! definitely a big fan of the crazy, broken elle. *hugs fics* and *hugs you*. i want more!!! ;)

petitebelette September 13 2009, 21:46:48 UTC

Thank you!! Crazy, broken Elle is my favorite. *hugs you!* Aww, I'm not going anywhere, no worries.

superkappa September 13 2009, 22:10:36 UTC

I loved the first one. So twisted and oddly sweet in the way only Sylar can be.

The second one was my favorite though. The imagery you used in it was so vivid, I loved it.

petitebelette September 13 2009, 22:31:56 UTC

Thank you dearrr. :D

I love twisted and oddly sweet Sylar the best, ngl.

superkappa September 13 2009, 22:35:35 UTC

Me too, bb, me too.

havemy_heart September 14 2009, 02:25:41 UTC

I enjoyed both, but the second one was a punch to the gut. So sad. Elle needs a hug.

petitebelette September 14 2009, 03:47:39 UTC

TY!! I'm glad you enjoyed it. <3 She needs lots of hugs. :(

dragynflies September 14 2009, 16:19:58 UTC

These are beautiful drabbles -- I am really into everything you write, and these are no exceptions. You have a wonderful way of putting words together for fantastic imagery.