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tylashke

Dominant Desires

May 24, 2012 22:56

Title: Dominant Desires
Disclaimer: Bleach doesn't belong to me... I just borrow the characters for my muse to play with.
Rating: NC-17
Warning/Info: Smut... and I think that's about it.
Pairing: KenShuu
A/N: Extremely late response to last spring's ( Read more... )

bleach, shuuhei, kensei, fanfiction, one-shot

Comments 6

ichibanseiken May 25 2012, 01:20:45 UTC

This was a fun read! Aside from what I wrote on ff.net, I'd like to mention that their relative position is unclear. I thought Kensei was taking Shuu from behind; if so, there is no way he can bite his clavicle, which is on the front of the body. Were you thinking of the muscle that runs from the neck to the shoulder point? According tohttp://www.nomenclaturo.com/wp-content/uploads/human-body-muscle-names.gif
that's a trapezius.

A sequel would be nice, if the moose kisses you :-)

tylashke May 25 2012, 14:55:38 UTC

^^ Good catch. I totally missed that. Will be editing it to reflect it. As for the sequel, we'll see... XD There wasn't that much here that would reflect their voices, and I already had problems. A sequel would require much more, so... I have a feeling I'll be jumping between pairings between fics when the muse gets active though.

jakondas May 25 2012, 22:15:11 UTC

This is brilliant, and my first KenShuu, so thanks! It was entertaining, and sort of sweet, and I really liked the theme of Kensei claiming him. There was something altogether endearing about it.

tylashke May 25 2012, 22:24:50 UTC

Glad you like it! ^^ I wish I had more to recommend for this awesome but not the most popular pairing from Bleach, but I only have one here. It's an AU one-shot but very well written. Hope you enjoy~

writerx75 May 30 2012, 02:54:31 UTC

This was yummy. I really liked how detailed you were about Shuuhei's feelings toward Kensei and how they changed over time, and I also liked the way you wrote the interaction between the two of them, both in bed and out of it. I think it's good that Shuuhei seems to like to be ordered around, even in bed, because it seems like he'd need to get used to it otherwise. A strong piece overall - well done!

tylashke May 30 2012, 03:25:26 UTC

I'm kinda amused you'd think Shuu needs to be ordered around to get used to making out with Kensei. Hmm.. maybe he'd be too starstruck otherwise? XD I tend to do reflective pieces or at least have a portion that's reflective for couples I don't seem to be able to get into character on my first attempt, so I'm glad you liked that part as well. [I don't seem to have that problem while writing Ichigo though.. XD] Thank you! ^^