Critique Please

Jan 03, 2013 23:37

Self-Immolation ( Read more... )

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tierfal January 7 2013, 05:06:09 UTC
Eugh I love your work to death, and I don't really know enough about poetry to be very helpful? ;__;

The whole thing is beautiful, and peaceful and unsettling at the same time. I think the only thing I would change is that "calico curtains… finally faded" is a tiny bit too much alliteration for my tastes?

…but seriously how do you make this magic.

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