Part 3

[ubercackmeister]

Fair enough for your comments mateys. The B movie aspect I would like to point out I added on purpose (I was thinking rollerblade seven when i wrote it, which may not be good so i'll try and stop) and as for the dialogue, well I suck at it so I am kind of worried to write some, but I mean maybe it just does not matter. Anyway, I'll attempt a 3 part

Comments

[saint_ult]

I found that much better to read, keep it up. Don't be afraid to put in the occasional idea to keep things interesting. You stopped just when someone potentially interesting (the Mayor) was going to be introduced, to provide intrigue for your now much more solid world.