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The Best Laid Cons

Jul 17, 2010 03:58

Title: The Best Laid Cons
Author: Ultracape
Rating: Very mild sexual references
Genre and/or Pairing: Neal Caffrey/other
Spoilers: Season 2 - Withdrawal
Warnings: None ( Read more... )

author: ultracape, white collar, neal caffrey

Comments 10

daria234 July 17 2010, 08:17:40 UTC

HA!!! This is great - I really wanted Whitney to be less predictable than Neal and Moz thought, but never could have thought up this hilarity

ultracape July 17 2010, 08:23:31 UTC

Thank you. I loved the scene and after the show I just couldn't get it out of my head thinking how it could have gone so differently.

specklesinsnow July 17 2010, 09:05:17 UTC

OMG! LMAO - this is fantastic! I absolutely loved that scene in 2.01 - Neal/Bomer was hilarious - but the Nymph and I were only just discussing how we would not have reacted like Whitney. This would have been more the way we would have gone. LOL!

I am so delighted that you wrote this, and did such a great job with this 'alternative' scene. I am grinning while writing this. :D

BTW, I left a note at the comm. Your link there links to your Friends page, not this story, so you might want to edit it.

ultracape July 17 2010, 09:11:58 UTC

Thank you for letting me know and for your very kind comments. I know there are instructions posted but I always seem to mess up my postings here.

Yeah, I thought for someone who worked for such an arrogant jerk, she just seemed a bit too naive and so this scene just burst into my brain.

Again, thank you.

specklesinsnow July 17 2010, 09:38:37 UTC

You're welcome.

BTW, when I first started using LJ I found this page really useful:

http://www.livejournal.com/support/faq.bml

riazendira July 18 2010, 07:52:25 UTC

I absolutely love the last line of this! Oh Mozzie.

ultracape July 18 2010, 07:54:49 UTC

Thank you

ebeneezerdark August 31 2011, 03:48:08 UTC

I'm picturing Neal with a totally "Deer-in-the-headlights" look now... Aww, poor Neal.

If faced with someone as intelligent, charming, and HOT as Neal (back when I wasn't yet old enough to be his mom *sigh*), it would've taken more than that "I just got outta prison" line to turn me off. Sure, I'd have been VERY careful about condoms (one of the things that'll put you on the "deferral" list for donating blood due to likelihood of HIV is "been in jail/prison"). But he'd have needed to come off a LOT more skeevy than just that one line before I'd have skittered off the way What's-Her-Name did.

ultracape August 31 2011, 04:05:40 UTC

Believe me, I'm old enough to be his "old" mother but Neal was coming across as just a titch creepy with the body language, if not the actual words. Put them together, with the prison remark "He caught me, both times" and yeah, I'd be crept out. The thing that got me was that the EW assistant could not possibly have been such an innocent. With everything she must have been doing for him, she must have known about the crime so it just didn't make sense to me that she would be afraid of Neal.

Anyway, glad you liked the story.

ebeneezerdark August 31 2011, 07:10:05 UTC

I didn't see him as scary-creepy, but then, in my "misspent youth", I spent time with some sorta weird and unconventional types... Granted, they were more like young Mozzie might've been than like the sort of scary-ex-con Neal was trying to project to scare off the assistant gal. Even so, Neal's basic charm and intelligence came through enough that, coupled with the totally shallow "Oooh, YUMMY! I'd hit THAT in a heartbeat!" reaction, it probably wouldn't have turned me off when I was young and reckless.