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undying_desire July 29 2011, 23:45:55 UTC
Oh yay, I'm glad my writing can drag you into the scenes. ^^ They won't stay heartbreaking forever...or at least I hope not.

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undying_desire July 29 2011, 23:50:30 UTC
Seunghyun being a bad boy and breaking hearts. I should scold him for that. Haha.
We'll find out about TOP's past and secret present life soon enough. ^.^ Thanks for reading.

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maki_of_japan July 29 2011, 22:42:10 UTC
Aww poor Ji T.T

Ihope Seunghyun doesn'y continue to push him away...

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undying_desire July 29 2011, 23:52:26 UTC
Jiyong is a fighter! I'm sure he'll find a way to pull Seunghyun back even if he's being pushed away. 지용 화이팅!

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miracleshining July 29 2011, 22:45:19 UTC
This was very delicate and bittersweet. There is real emotion in these words and it comes out smoothly.

What I appreciate the most about this is the reality of the situation. I like the fact that though Seunghyun wants to hold on, despite his better judgement, he is still think of what he is and who he is. An "actor" for all his clients. But I'm also pleased to see there is a softness that is rapidly forming around him, Jiyong being the cause.

As for Ji, his reactions are so normal that it was heartbreaking, and I appreciated that. I felt for him and the struggle he had was very real. Of course, I always enjoy when I see that lyrics or music are also involved the storyline.

Great job, looking forward to the next chapter!

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undying_desire July 29 2011, 23:57:12 UTC
Oh I'm so glad you can feel their emotions. It makes reading much more enjoyable when you can understand the characters. ^^

I feel bad for giving them a slice-of-life instead of a nice fluffy romance sometimes. You're right though, reality is sometimes what helps build a story.

Gah, and I feel even worse for being cruel to Jiyong. Now, you must tell me what these lyrics are because I don't know what I used. xD

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miracleshining July 30 2011, 00:27:04 UTC
::smiles:: Well, Jiyong wrote the lyrics as noted in the last paragraph, so what does his heart say they are? (Though I do have a beautiful song/lyrics that seem to fit the mood going through my head like when I wrote the lyrics for "Can You Save Me?")

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undying_desire July 30 2011, 00:39:39 UTC
Oh, silly me thought you meant I quoted lyrics from a song. xD I have a running list of tracks there were inspirational for this story and it wouldn't be odd if a line from one slipped into the text. Haha. I'm not as skilled at writing lyrics though, so I'm not sure I'll go above and beyond like you. ~.^

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jin2jin July 29 2011, 23:28:43 UTC
i just read this and its so good D: poor jiyong tho =/ amazing story i cant wait for the next chapter

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undying_desire July 29 2011, 23:58:11 UTC
Awe, I know Jiyong getting hurt so early on in this fic even made me sad. Thank you for reading. *Hugs*

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jin2jin July 30 2011, 00:00:33 UTC
how could i not read this D: im going to ninja this fic from now on >D

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undying_desire July 30 2011, 00:03:33 UTC
Oh my, careful with those ninja skills, we wouldn't want anyone getting hurt. Haha.

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