There was one thing that bothered me a bit; the formatting. It being one big paragraph makes it very difficult and frustrating to read and I strongly suggest the use of paragraphs next time; it makes any fic better. Other than that, cool fic. Keep up the good work.
“Oh my god, I’m a fucking puffer!” I cried a little too loud, my pale skin turning prefusely red as I jumped up from the seat, and I was thanking my lucky stars that everyone else had gone from the room. “You’re what?” Weasley looked at me astonished, “I’m uh..” I struggled for words, “..I need a fucking muffler for my new car!” I couldn’t think of anything else to say at the time, but he looked at me mockingly, “you mean to say you have a muggle car?” I just stared, “never mind, if you need a muffler, come to my place during the break, we have heaps of spare parts,” he smiled. I couldn’t believe it, he was being so nice; which was rather unusual for him, I just spat, “I don’t want a Weasley’s spare parts in my car!” What was I saying?! His smile became a big grin, “oh, Malfoy, you’re such an idiot.” Well there was a surprise if ever I had one! How dare the muggle lover call me an idiot! “I..”
lmfao that part was funny. i loved it. glad draco is not being too mean
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*Love the avatar by the way. 'Tis very hot. =^_^=
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lmfao that part was funny. i loved it. glad draco is not being too mean
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