May Week 1 for Brigit's Flame

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An attempt at poetry (not my strongest area). Big SORRY about the punctuation but it confused the heck out of me in poetry so feel free to help me out. All three prompts used in some way (I hope).

"There was a spark." she said, acting full of joy.
"A spark?" I asked. "When you looked at the boy?"
She nodded her head and gave a sweet smile
and explained

Comments

[keppiehed]

I didn't see the ending coming! Poems that tell a story in a linear fashion are quite unique, and I appreciate your efforts. And I know that rhyming couldn't have been easy to do. Nicely done!

[osoreranai]

I have to admit, I thought the ending was a bit of a twist. I was more interested in the structure of the poem than anything else, though. I'm not familiar with the form. It looks interesting.

Editor!

[eiremauve]

This poem sounds a bit like Doctor Seuss, especially the first stanza. I like it. In poetry, you can basically punctate however you want. :) I would recommend that you keep it consistent, in the first part you use traditional punctuation, but in the second you do not. Think about how you want to punctuate it, what style of punctuation would 'fit' the poem you're writing. Good job with this!