LJ Idol Week 21: Gadgets

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He's got a long, too-long nose and deep set, pin-point eyes. Green skin, sick algae soup under not-too-tight cellophane. He smiles up at you from within a candy-stripe suit not washed for years and introduces himself with a Georgia peach smile. Rotten, too sweet, but the sun's all over it

Comments

[lilmissmagic71]

This is very discordant and surreal... I like the imagery, disturbing as it is... of course, I have always said that imagery is ever so much more than the ability to describe a beautiful thing... it lies in the ability to strike a nerve and evoke something in your reader... you have achieved it with this piece. It has almost a Pythagorean feel, as if it should only be understood fully by one who is an initiate... but the very esoteric presentation is still not hard to read. I like it. I think you did well.

[unsold_capacity]

Thank you! I'm glad you think it's still not hard to read. One thing about writing something like this is that while you the writer can see through the layers and make sense of it, it's hard to tell how easy that's going to be for someone else. I had two very different friends read it and tell me what they thought of it, and what they thought happened, and I got pretty similar reactions so I thought that was a good sign. I'm glad you liked it :)

[fidgety]

I'm a huge fan of surrealist writing. Unfortunately, my brain is a coma right now, so I'm not all about expanding on that.

[unsold_capacity]

I'd love it if you could expand any on what you thought of this :) I love surrealism, too, in all forms (I did an art project based in Dali and he stole my heart).

[kittenboo]

that is just wild girl

[unsold_capacity]

lol, thanks?

[kittenboo]

sorry i meant that in a good way! it's just the first thing that came to mind to say, lol.

[unsold_capacity]

:) I figured. Regular thanks, then!

[puppetmaker40]

this took me a couple of reads to work through what you were doing but it was worth each read.

Nicely done.

[spydielives]

oh SNAP!

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