yet another drabble

[uptosummat]

Title: Melting
Word Count: 136

Comments

[dove_cry]

Hmm I liked it. As you already know, I'm a fan of the preventing suicide type stories.

I think the listing effect makes it grab the reader's attention.

I like your expression in lines like "melting into the gray."

Well done.

[uptosummat]

thank you

I tend to write in list form a lot...I just like it better.

[dove_cry]

I do that a lot too actually. I think it draws more attention to each line, like I'm trying to make them each as important as the others. And also just a habit. lol

[uptosummat]

lol yeah

[anonymous]

the sujbect is kind of typical but you did a good job writign it