this thing i wrote just now

[urbancontra]

Baby, she would have cooed to me, Baby, one day we'll make it. Her hair like leaves on a golden willow, batting at her eyes. Fussing with it in fits of adorability. Raising the bar, lowering my spirits. Raising my chin with her fingertips, lowering my eyes. Look, Look. Her lips pucker and her eyes flash. A thousand flimsy adjectives flash

Comments

[kolibrihaliwell]

... Speechless, baby.
Now that is pure poetry.

- Eve.

[urbancontra]

thank you, honey. I'd comment more on your writing, but all of it leaves me just as speechless.

[fightinjesuit]

But she's Ulysses. She's The Odyssey, The Aeneid. She's the Bible. She's MY Bible. Written in Braille and highlighted with White-out at the places I like the best.

That's my favorite part. But, chyou know, it's allll good!

[urbancontra]

I liked the end. I'd been saving that metaphor for awhile now. I was unsure about the part you commented on, so thank you for the vote of confidence!

[martiniandrossi]

The thing you wrote just now is very beautiful.

[urbancontra]

...from someone who would certainly know a thing or two about beauty.

Sorry, i had to do it.

I'm glad you like :D

[martiniandrossi]

you callin me fat?

[urbancontra]

Well, actually i was doing the opposite.