You're certainly a writer... your thesis statement doesn't appear until the middle of the third page. Hehehe.
But then again, Eliot would be very proud of you; you're very good at writing professionally and "extinguishing personality." I find it really hard to do that... I always end up joking around with the reader when I write, which is usually completely inappropriate in the academic setting.
There are a few teeeeeeny tiny typos, so if you haven't turned it in already, I'd give it a good once-over to catch those... but they're nothing big that would detract from the content of the essay.
Pff, thesis statements. I'm completely against them. I think a complex argument can't be summed up in a statement. I think a three page introduction will do.
That's true... when you said "I will argue..." I was like, "Wow, that sounds really forced and out-of-place." Down with thesis statements, I say! If the reader is interested and engaged, they will be able to figure out what the essay's about!
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But then again, Eliot would be very proud of you; you're very good at writing professionally and "extinguishing personality." I find it really hard to do that... I always end up joking around with the reader when I write, which is usually completely inappropriate in the academic setting.
There are a few teeeeeeny tiny typos, so if you haven't turned it in already, I'd give it a good once-over to catch those... but they're nothing big that would detract from the content of the essay.
Congratulations (slacker)! :)
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Thanks for actually reading it :)
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