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[urielx]

Oh, How Well They Wrote

Those who wrote before us are but fossils,
imprints within swaths of stone,
We outline their poems with greedy fingers,
this is how they must have lived,
oh, how well they wrote!but can you feel them breathing

Comments

[treehouseblues]

Hello! It is you.

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[nnanyl]

This is very interesting and I love the subject matter, but L1 & 2 seem a bit incomplete to me as if the message was not properly getting through. L4 & 5 seem a bit unnecessary to me because I do not have any similar imagery or anything leading up to it, so it makes me wonder why is their breathing mentioned? What is important about these two lines? L10, me personally, I would cut that all together. Naturally, as I read I came to an abrupt stop at 'limestone' and I prefer it that way. As you come to another stanza I finally find a correlation to the former 'breathing' but it still seems unnecessary to the poem (to me).

I do love how the poem ends, we are inspired by all manner of things, especially those that tried their hand at this particular art before. Interesting read, thanks for sharing it.