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[usakpopluvr]

Dont critize people this is my first time ever trying to write a story or as in my words "drabble"

Title: Taemins game
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: HyunMin
Summary: taemin is bored and he wants to play a game with jonghyun?

Hmm hyung sure been is his room for quite a while, why is he so much FUN without me hehe now is my time to show him my real side."

Comments

[usakpopluvr]

OHHHHHHHHHHHH MYYYYYYYYYYY GAWD THAT IS SOO FUKING AMAZING CUZ YOU ARE LIKE ME IDOLLLL~! AND TO GET THIS MEANS THE WORLD TOM EE THNAXXXXXXX I FUCKNG LOVE YOU WITH ALL MY HEART I REALLY HOPE YOU WRITE THAT TAE TOP!XJONG THAT A BE FUCKING AMAZINGERERERERER I LUVS YOU~!

[lemoluv22]

this isnt too bad [: but i do suggest adding a lot more descriptives in the story instead of just inner/outer monologue but the writing style isnt too bad at all ^-^ good job on your first time!

[usakpopluvr]

oHHHHH MMMMYYYYYY FGGGGAAAAAAAWWWWWD RHIS RHIS IS JUST FICKING AMAZING AHHHHHHHRO GET SOME RESPONSE FROM
ALLL OFF MY SMUTASTIS QUEENNNS RAWR THANK YOU THANK YOUUU SOOO MUCH FOE THE ADVICE KRKEKEKEJEKEK WITH
I MAY HAVE THE GUTTTS TO ACTUALLY WRITE SOMETHING MAY TAKE ME SOMEEEE TIME I NEVER WRITTEN ANYTHING BEFORE
NOT ALONE A SMUT KEKEKEKEKEKEKEKHWHE
VUR ONCE I START I MAY NOT BE ABLE TOOO STOPP HAHAHAHA I THINKS ME GONNNA HAVE SUMMM FUNN!!!!!!!!!!

[crazy_rourou]

my first time ever reading HyunMin I was curious how it's like, but finaly I like it that was funny,very bad Minnie kekeke

[mickota]

Okay, second one now. Hmm maybe I should have read this one first. My badness.
Pretty much the same advice from my other comment. The storyline is playful with evil maknae and nervous Jonghyun xD It would be interesting if Taemin is dominant and Jonghyun is so submissive, you never see that anymore -.-
Ahhh~ The pointers above are good. I don't think you need my help on this one :P
(I just noticed the top says not to criticize *laughs*)