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SPN Fic: Intolerance of Ambiguity

Nov 13, 2008 10:25

Intolerance of Ambiguity
By: Vain
9/27/2008 - 11/10/2008

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supernatural, spn fic, strange angels

Comments 31

niccy07 November 19 2008, 02:17:39 UTC

You have totally left me wanting a longer fic where Sam and Castiel fight over Dean.

Incredible piece. Very interesting insight to both Sam and Dean's situation. I love your writing!

vain_chan November 19 2008, 19:42:47 UTC

Thank you. ^^ Supernatural has permanently devoured my brain, I fear. ... Though I suppose there are worse things. And Castiel vs. Sam pushes all sorts of buttons for me, too. *g* Possessive Sammy = awesome.

Thank you for reviewing and I'm glad you liked the fic.

vesuvianite November 23 2008, 03:32:09 UTC

This is a very cool story (and very well-written). I like your version of Castiel, and how we are privy to all his thoughts. I like how he sees his "Child"--with affection, frustration, protectiveness, and bit of awe.

Your portrait of Sam, as a young man whose soul is slowly being overtaken by darkness, yet who still manages to battle back from the edge (at least, for now), is intriguing.

So, good stuff, all around. And I'm eager to read more in this series. =)

I do have one concrit to offer. I think this repetition must have gotten missed on the final read-through. You say "he [Dean] upended seemingly half a bottle of ketchup over his plate" in one paragraph. And then a couple paragraphs later, you say, "he poured seemingly half a bottle of ketchup on his plate".

I also caught a couple of typos. It should be "toe", here, rather than "tow":
This is the same guy who threatened to send you back to Hell if you didn't tow the party line, remember?

And here (They'd been keeping their voices low and hadn't attracted any ( ... )

vain_chan November 25 2008, 15:56:43 UTC

Thank you so much for the edits. I've gone through and made the appropriate changes. @.@ I can only stare at a text for so long before it all starts to bleed together.

From a canon standpoint, I haven't been real thrilled by the distance between the boys this season, but it gives the ficcers a lot to play with at least. I was rewatching some eps from the second season a while back and Sam's development throughout the series has been kind of amazing; I really want to work with that and see how far I can push him--and nothing seems to push Sam's buttons like the threat of losing Dean. The next fic in the series will focus more on Sam and how he deals with everything. Hopefully, it won't take me a month to write this time.

Dean and Castiel will be in the fifth fic, but I promise that it will be worth the wait.

Thank you so much for reviewing and for your input with the concrit. I'm glad you liked the fic. ^_^v

vesuvianite November 25 2008, 23:27:40 UTC

From a canon standpoint, I haven't been real thrilled by the distance between the boys this season,

I thought it was interesting that Kripke said both actors had approached him, separatedly, saying they were having some difficulty playing their roles with that distance between the brothers.

jetaimerai November 30 2008, 01:34:30 UTC

Whoa, hi Vain! For some reason I wasn't expecting you when I suddenly got into this fandom, but I'm glad you are because this fic is AMAZING. You are SUCH a wonderful writer - you have a great level of detail, but it's not overly done, and you write the thoughts and emotions so vividly that you can really imagine and feel everything.

I think, out of all the Dean/Castiel fic I've read so far, you have Castiel's character down best, and seeing the boys through their eyes is very interesting. I love your portrayal of Sam here too, and their confrontation was brilliant. I cannot wait to see their fight over Dean, it's bound to be explosive in the best way. I just cannot wait for the next installments in this series, period!

vain_chan December 4 2008, 19:59:24 UTC

=^^= Thank you. Supernatural is a special kind of crack and it kind of devoured my brain this past summer. And then Season 4 started and . . well . . . Season 4 = awesome ( ... )

ruby_jelly May 7 2009, 04:05:13 UTC

"t was fear of himself.

In that instant, the boy looked like the shy young man who'd shaken his hand scant days ago--heartrendingly young and painfully lost. Far from the Light.

Oh God, Dean . . .

The thought was projected and intrusive and entirely unintentional on the boy's part, but it struck Castiel hard, momentarily dragging the angel down in a heady and impossible to scrutinize mixture of needfeargrieflovefailuresorrowlustguiltragelosswantsorrysorrysosorryIcan't-"

Gah! You made the screen glaze with tears, oh wait - that's me. These characterisations are brilliant, and maybe I'll even develop some patience for Castiel with reading, 'cos so far, .... hmmm.....

Thank you.

vain_chan May 15 2009, 03:21:58 UTC

Thank you! Castiel is a lot of fun to write--misguided, but well-meaning. Thank you for reviewing and I'm glad you liked the fic.

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