That was a rather abrupt ending but I see from your comments that it was intended to leave the resolution of this open so I now understand that this is not chapter one with a second part to follow. What a spot to leave it but in my 'verse he survives.
Poor Alan, the guilt he would be feeling over the argument, his distraction possibly contributing to their involvement in the accident and now the very real possibility that Don may not survive it. Protest showed that there were many issues surrounding Alan's perception of the FBI despite and perhaps even rekindled by his own son joining the bureau and becoming a 'damn fed'. You were aiming for angst, you got sure it.
Nice one!
PS: This also sounds a lot like a hurt_don challenge prompt...
Yeah, a hell of a ride, this one for the both of them. Not sure either of them will ever get into a car as casually as before.
Sorry if the ending was a bit too abrupt for you. As far as I'm concerned, Donny lives as well, but I wanted to leave it a bit open ended, seemed to fit the prompts so I went with it.
Yeah, Alan's perception of the FBI is such a great point of tension between the two of them that I've been wanting to explore it a bit more in depth than what we saw. I'll address some more of it in Stardust, but expect more along this vein at a later date.
Thanks for pointing the Clue Challenge thing out to me!
Ouch, you really did a number on him, and I love it!!!
This is so gorgeously angsty and whumpy... I loooooove it!!! Certainly fits with the N3- mood this week, what with the eps being cut down and now the fic with the destruction and angst... I know it was unintended, but still...
Anyways, I love Alan's pov and how he deals with things, especially with the guilt... I also love the snippet about Don's past with the broken fingers and that he does not complain a lot and forgives easily are all character traits that they never show but can be seen by watching the character, which you did...
Lol, your first line is fantastic. What's wrong with us that this is our first reaction to this type of fic? :D
N3 eps being cut down? What?!?! What have I missed? I've been kinda in NaNo land the past week.
Glad you liked Alan's pov. I was a little afraid I'd gone too much towards Alan's end of the spectrum here with little conscious!Don, but I figured that only served to increase the angst factor as he's so injured he's out of it.
Wow. Wonderful story and GREAT use of prompts. Alan's pov was perfect - especially with Don hurt and unconscious through most of it. Alan is such a strong character and sometimes he gets lost in the Don and Charlie stuff, but you gave him a great sounding board in this one and it worked very well.
As far as the ending, my response as a reader was Oh, no! You can't leave it like that!! But, after I started breathing again, and thought about it from an author's pov, it was extremely effective.
All in all, a splendid effort, a very enjoyable read, and a really nice birthday present. (lucky Corine!)
Nice idea of using a car crash to whump Don and you managed to include one of my favourite kinds of whump: Being impaled. :)
I have to admitt that I want more. As much as I like the whump - I love the comfort, the whole waking up in the hospital, the recovery and having the support of family, friends and team thing... But, despite of the lack of the comfort I really liked the story!
Thank you for this story!
Saphira
PS.: Don gets stabbed? When? Where? How? No, don't tell me! Just tell me in which season (or is is "just" a fanfic?) so that I know if I have the season already at home and I'll see the episode this or next week or if I have to wait for it...
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That was a rather abrupt ending but I see from your comments that it was intended to leave the resolution of this open so I now understand that this is not chapter one with a second part to follow. What a spot to leave it but in my 'verse he survives.
Poor Alan, the guilt he would be feeling over the argument, his distraction possibly contributing to their involvement in the accident and now the very real possibility that Don may not survive it. Protest showed that there were many issues surrounding Alan's perception of the FBI despite and perhaps even rekindled by his own son joining the bureau and becoming a 'damn fed'. You were aiming for angst, you got sure it.
Nice one!
PS: This also sounds a lot like a hurt_don challenge prompt...
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Sorry if the ending was a bit too abrupt for you. As far as I'm concerned, Donny lives as well, but I wanted to leave it a bit open ended, seemed to fit the prompts so I went with it.
Yeah, Alan's perception of the FBI is such a great point of tension between the two of them that I've been wanting to explore it a bit more in depth than what we saw. I'll address some more of it in Stardust, but expect more along this vein at a later date.
Thanks for pointing the Clue Challenge thing out to me!
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This is so gorgeously angsty and whumpy... I loooooove it!!! Certainly fits with the N3- mood this week, what with the eps being cut down and now the fic with the destruction and angst... I know it was unintended, but still...
Anyways, I love Alan's pov and how he deals with things, especially with the guilt... I also love the snippet about Don's past with the broken fingers and that he does not complain a lot and forgives easily are all character traits that they never show but can be seen by watching the character, which you did...
Masterpiece- like stuff... :)
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:D
N3 eps being cut down? What?!?! What have I missed? I've been kinda in NaNo land the past week.
Glad you liked Alan's pov. I was a little afraid I'd gone too much towards Alan's end of the spectrum here with little conscious!Don, but I figured that only served to increase the angst factor as he's so injured he's out of it.
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I sent you a link a couple of days ago, but with NaNo, I can understand if you missed it...
Here are a couple of links to catch you up :)
http://community.livejournal.com/numb3rs_notice/550728.html
http://community.livejournal.com/numb3rs_notice/552665.html
http://community.livejournal.com/r_morrow_daily/352961.html
http://community.livejournal.com/savecolby/459773.html
I'll write you an email tonight, sorry I've been out of touch, college is kicking my arse left, right and centre...
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As far as the ending, my response as a reader was Oh, no! You can't leave it like that!! But, after I started breathing again, and thought about it from an author's pov, it was extremely effective.
All in all, a splendid effort, a very enjoyable read, and a really nice birthday present. (lucky Corine!)
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Nice idea of using a car crash to whump Don and you managed to include one of my favourite kinds of whump: Being impaled. :)
I have to admitt that I want more. As much as I like the whump - I love the comfort, the whole waking up in the hospital, the recovery and having the support of family, friends and team thing... But, despite of the lack of the comfort I really liked the story!
Thank you for this story!
Saphira
PS.: Don gets stabbed? When? Where? How? No, don't tell me! Just tell me in which season (or is is "just" a fanfic?) so that I know if I have the season already at home and I'll see the episode this or next week or if I have to wait for it...
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