A poem I wrote

[vampyroteuthis]

I wrote this awhile ago, it has to do with the cosmos

Comments

[summertrain]

I like it. It's definitely different than most of the poetry I read in these livejournals, or any poetry in general. This poem has a mythological feel to it, which I like. I especially like how your poem illuminates how, in the grand scheme of things, meaningless our world is. I will leave some constructive criticism before I go, though... I think if you tightened up your poem a little, it would work better. There are some things in the poem that I think are unnecessary. I really like it, though. It's good. It's different.