it is absolutely GORGEOUS to be here... so much green... so no matter how much the army is jerking my chain about getting home-home, i'm still happy as can be. how have you been?
I hope "about the shatter" was on purpose, because it is my favorite part. It gives me a picture of two people actually shattered, but being held together and looking at each other in pieces.
about to shatter was most certainly on purpose... that is the most important thing about poetry: because everything is compact, you have to express as much as possible in every single word. you can't waste a word, and you certainly can't be any less than careful as hell when you choose a phrase. i was going over it in my head when i was first writing the lines, and then i chose to speak out loud the entire thing, and when i got to the end i just said "the" instead of "to" and thought to myself "i like that more. yes, i like that more." and there it is.
David, that was completely an accident. I erased a bunch of communities and must have accidently done yours too. I added you back and please forgive me.
I remember someone on OD who wrote like this. I love it. Glad you are stateside again. Let me know when you are in TN, so I can mail the package to your folks' house. Take care! - Diane
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how have you been?
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i was going over it in my head when i was first writing the lines, and then i chose to speak out loud the entire thing, and when i got to the end i just said "the" instead of "to" and thought to myself "i like that more. yes, i like that more." and there it is.
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so i can talk to you.
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that was completely an accident. I erased a bunch of communities and must have accidently done yours too. I added you back and please forgive me.
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that's ok, i was just confused.
i hope to see you someday soon.
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