[FIC] The things we do for love, ch2

[vega_pandanina]

Title: The things we do for love
Genre: ... still not quite sure...
Characters: Kakashi, Iruka, and Pakkun!
Comments: Vii! Sinisterbug beta-d for me! (Much love!) :D
Status: Complete

There were many moments in the life of Hatake Kakashi that, while they were happening, he thought it couldn’t possibly get any worse. Unfortunately for him, “worse” always

Comments

[kiria_dk]

"Go, or I'll cling to your ass like a rabid chipmunk for the rest of eternity."

*dies* Oh, gods, that was funny. Thanks, I really needed that. Pakkun as Cupid... The world may never recover. I'm really enjoying this series. You'll be continuing it, I hope?

(Nitpicks: Still some grammatical errors and odd sentence construction, but that's forgivable since English isn't your first language. If you need or would like a second beta, let me know. My email is in my profile, and I'd be happy to help.)

[vega_pandanina]

I'm glad you like it! Yeah, that was my favorite line for a very long time too, when I was writing it. ^^

And I could just imagine him with pink little wingies! >D

No, I really don't think I will, I'm sorry. Though I might write more drabbles, now that my scanner is half-dead... -_-"

Odd sentence construction? (Damn, I thought I nailed them all... grr...) Could you tell me where (pretty please, for the sake of learning *gives you puppy eyes*)? Thank you so much, I'll be bugging you then too! (No pun intended... v_v")

[kiria_dk]

Oh, darn, I was hoping there'd be more. Ah, well. Writer's perogative and all that. *giggles at image of Pakkun with pink cupid wings*

I'll have to look through it again for the odd sentences, but I'll let you know when I find them. *falls to the puppy eyes of DOOM*

[kiria_dk]

Ok, here's a couple. There weren't a lot.

...the former Anbu with three kunai in hand made a step towards the door.
This would make more sense as: "...with three kunai in hand, the former Anbu took a step..."

The only other oddity is at the very end, when you use "he'll" (he will) instead of "he'd" (he would). It should be "He'd just have to play..." and "...he'd be a chipmunk..." Don't worry, that one confuses some native speakers, too. -_-;

Again, loved it, and don't hesitate to bug me via email with questions or beta requests.

[allhisengines]

awww. Pakkun being the go-between is the cutest thing I've ever heard of. I love fics with Pakkun <3333

[vega_pandanina]

I really like them too, because of his... insolance? He makes the best anti-Cupid, in my opinion. ^^

[be_be_waltz]

....Wow. They ^^^ said all I wanted too.

Grr. ><;; Oh well. I love your writings. Keep up the good works.

[vega_pandanina]

Thank you! I'm glad you like them. :D *salutes* Yes sir!

[bouncy_cat]

Ahhh, Kakashi hugging Pakkun, so sweet!
And the whole scene before he finally opens the door was hilarious.
Wonderful story! Make more of 'em!!! Please???(looks at you with big pleading pug eyes)

[vega_pandanina]

*Oh no! Not the big pleading pug eyes! I'll be toast! ... must... resist... but...*

Thanks! I tried. (Or, well, rather, it just sort of came, but I tried writing it down in english anyway. :P) Though I don't think I'll be writing that much more, maybe a few drabbles here and there while my scanner is bust, but this is not my field, and I'm rather limping in it too, I think.

[curious_dw]

Aw! That was really cute. I thoughti t was well written and an interesting story! Well done.
^_~
CDW

[vega_pandanina]

Thank you! I'm glad you found it cute. ^^