fix it fest: as the wind behaves (snarry, 2/2)

[verdeckt]

Title: as the wind behaves
Author: Caecelia (verdeckt)
Betas:: SO many thanks to accioslash and atdelphi for your invaluable advice; I learned so much from you both. ♥ Any remaining mistakes are my own.
Other pairings/threesome: Ron/Hermione
Rating: light R
Word count: 18,553
Warning(s): Harry is not quite 18.
SPOILERS/What you are fixing: (highlight for spoilers) *

Comments

[verdeckt]

WOW! I'm sitting speechless here. Your work has been a model for me, a primary source of inspiration, and I can't begin to tell you what it means to communicate with you like this. Your Snape especially has shaped my view of the Snarry pairing -- I reread Barmy and No Looking Back and Not Over and Blue Tranquilium all the time, and have only been too shy to let you know how much I love your writing.

Thank you for your lovely, lovely comment. I'm so glad Snape came across as awful; I kept fearing he wasn't nearly awful enough, and sought with each rewrite to make him even more messed-up and grumpy and neurotic and horrible if heartrenderingly so, yet even that never seemed quite enough . . . It seemed especially important to me that he not relent to Harry, so I am particularly delighted to hear that this aspect worked for you.

Again, so many thanks! ♥

[verdeckt]

I have a lot of trouble making my Snape as awful as he ought to be for fanon.

I find it very hard not to woobify him. (I never feel that you cross the line, though -- you always maintain his volatility and fundamental insecurity and instinct to lash out when uncomfortable.) I love a Snape who cries (although not the way he cries in the new movie) and spits and throws screaming fits. I don't think these traits take away any of his potential to be one hell of a bastard. Rickman WAY underplays the character, I completely agree. He's not nearly twitchy or nervous enough: the way he holds himself is so humourless and stoic that I am always reminded of misunderstood romantic heroes rather than low-class, dirty, snarling Snape. To a certain extent, I think Rickman even makes Snape seem less mean. For me at least, Rickman's Snape is so damn predictable and obviously good that his character no longer has the potential to frighten, to shock, to overwhelm . . .

I try not to be committed to a single version of himThis is very wise, I think,

[gunxshyed]

This was so wonderful, I can barely stand it. The picture you paint with words, the magic you work with details is stunning. Your characterizations were so unrelenting and strong, and Snape's resigned paleness shone right through his personality, making him seem so much older than he is.

The kiss in the rain, the descriptions of the coming autumn season... it was like a warm glow within that pelting, shivering curtain pushing them together, and Harry's quick shift to worry upon feeling Snape's fever... it was all just breathtaking for me.

Well done, truly. This is just a beautiful, moody piece that I will come back to again and again.

[verdeckt]

Oh my goodness, I cannot even begin to describe how wonderful and inspiring and beautiful your comment is. Thank you for sharing your thoughts in detail.

This: it was like a warm glow within that pelting, shivering curtain pushing them together, and Harry's quick shift to worry upon feeling Snape's fever... This is so beautifully phrased, such a poetic interpretation that I was left stunned reading it, because yes -- that is exactly the feeling I'd hoped to bring across, even though I wasn't consciously aware of it until you mentioned it here.

Thank you. I will be coming back to reflect on your words, which have made me happier than I can express.

[adafrog]

Very well done, thanks.

[verdeckt]

Thank you so much! :-)

[accioslash]

I'm sorry I didn't have the opportunity earlier to tell you how much I enjoyed this story. But I love the pacing and the style here. You really have a talent with imagery and a genuine gift with mood and characterization. And the dialogue! Snape is especially well-done. It is just so very much like him to give no quarter, to be unforgiving and unrelenting and yet, to still be the man Harry learns to love.

The intensity of the piece mirrors the intensity of the men in the story. It was gripping and powerful with mystery and suspense and dramatic realizations that made practically every line a virtual masterpiece of storytelling. You had me at the first line and never let up until the end. Truly, a brilliant piece. I will be reading this one again. Lovely!

[verdeckt]

You are such a gem - thank you, first of all, for organising such a wonderful fest, and second, for being lovely and just being there for me when it became apparent that I was not going to finish this until the very last minute. Your suggestions were brilliant and the story is much better for having gone through your hands. I cannot thank you enough.

I am so delighted and relieved that Snape seemed plausibly unrelenting. There were moments during the writing process where I panicked, fearing he was too woobified and not nearly nasty enough. I am so, so grateful to you for your beautiful and encouraging words. That the story maintained an atmosphere of suspense and conveyed some of that -- forgive me this phrasing -- electrifying Snarry intensity is the greatest compliment I could receive. Thank you for being such a generous, kind reader. I am in your debt. ♥

[cluegirl]

This is beautifully done. I often think that the most terrifying thing in the world for Severus is getting what he wants. Because he's gotten what he thought he wanted so very many times in his life, only to have it bite him in the arse and leave him far worse off than before, he's grown to thoroughly distrust his own desires. Harry must terrify him right now.

And thank you, by the way, for not making Harry exactly a doormat. I like that he's got the wit and the spine to match up to Severus, even at his worst.

A nice story, this. I quite enjoyed it.

[verdeckt]

Ah! You have left me floored and delighted and quite overwhelmed. Thank you for your lovely, thought-provoking comment, cluegirl. I have long admired your work from that silent place where lurkers tend to bury themselves -- obsessively reread and devoured your work -- and I cannot even begin to tell you what this means to me