LJ Idol 10 - Week 3 - The Brushback Pitch

[veritas_st]

Dylan shifts against the throw cushions like they’re made of barb wire for the tenth time in as many minutes.

Nothing seems comfortable at the moment. Truth be told nothing had felt comfortable for years. Not since…

Comments

[rayaso]

I loved the way you left this, with the possibility of rejection, reconciliation, or something else. I also really enjoyed your opening sentence -- cushions like barbed wire. Very well done!

[veritas_st]

Thank you very much lovely! Its the prequel to the piece from last week.

xx

[mrstotten]

Loved this honey. The tone of the piece worked really well and I loved the flow and the indecision and love this

He’s spent too long, tried too hard to find out who he is. To figure out what he wants and he always comes back to Cal.

[veritas_st]

Thank you precious! I am loving my boys more and more each week.

xx

[adoptedwriter]

Nice way to end this passage! Lovely description too. Is this part of a bigger story?

[veritas_st]

Hey, thank you.

this is a sort of prequel to last weeks piece, The One Friend.

http://veritas-st.livejournal.com/119160.html

xx

[rswndrlst]

Oh my gosh my heart!

I hope the have a good talk whether they end up together or not and I hope Dylan can at least find a way to be happy. Not having the support of family can be so hard but I've learned eventually you have to be true to yourself.

"he’s got to try right? Because when life throws brushback pitches at you, you duck, or you take a fucking swing."

This! Yessss! Great use of the prompt!

(P.S. sorry about the edits my technology went all wonky)

[veritas_st]

Thank you for your comment. Yeah you do have to be true to yourself!

Its part of this story, it comes before.

http://veritas-st.livejournal.com/119160.html

[penpusher]

Really great how this is progressing, and the interior emotions and narrative are spot on. You're hitting a lot of key notes here.

[veritas_st]

Thank you so much. xx