Comments | vermin_disciple: FIC: Memento Mori

vermin_disciple

FIC: Memento Mori

May 15, 2010 17:01

Fandom Life on Mars
Characters: Sam, Annie, Gene, and the TCG
Rating: PG-13ish
Word Count: 1,650
Warnings: Poetry, mild zombie related gore, character death (of sorts), poetry, and a few lines of Latin. Oh, and poetry.
Summary: A mysterious message appears on a blackboard, the dead rise from their graves, and Sam’s world is inexplicably rendered ( Read more... )

!my fic: life on mars, !my fic

Comments 8

dorsetgirl May 16 2010, 14:10:07 UTC

This is amazing! I'm really sorry I don't have time to go through all of the details that I liked - there were an awful lot of them - but I really liked this. I wouldn't normally choose to read a zombie story, but Zombie!LOMfic seems to work for me.

And Annie's last verse, about a family of three turning up dead is a very clever way of making Sam wonder just how much of his dream was true.

Thank you for this!

vermin_disciple May 16 2010, 20:17:10 UTC

I have a fondness for Zombie!LoMfic as well. :)

And thank you! I'm very glad you enjoyed it!

sunnyrea May 16 2010, 21:41:23 UTC

LOL I seriously love you dear. Wonderful zombie poetry with Sam? WINNER! Fun times.

vermin_disciple May 17 2010, 22:57:18 UTC

My brain is a very strange place sometimes, hah. Thank you! <3

talkingtothesky May 19 2010, 05:34:49 UTC

I love this so much. :D

It has a really original style and flair to it and it's just perfect.

vermin_disciple May 20 2010, 07:16:52 UTC

I've never written anything like this before, and it's been a while since my last attempt at poetry, so writing this was definitely an experience. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you! <3

syniram June 4 2010, 05:13:44 UTC

Guh. Poetry makes me happy, and this.... Wow. Splendidly paced verse, variant and rich and just... The balance between the initial free verse and the common metre is perfect: this might be entirely in my head, but I've never seen free verse able to set the rhythm for a regular metre so effectively before. [is jealous]

My favourite stanza was up in the intro--'For here there are rules...'; the rhythm in that particular stanza is hard for me to follow (which isn't to say that it's off, just that I keep expecting a different number of feet than you have) but it's imagery is perfect, even if I can't figure out how to say it without stumbling over a word.

(I'd talk about the zombie!fic part, but really I'm not sure where the zombie!trend came from, and I find it a bit too weird to particularly enjoy. Unless, of course, it's attached to gorgeously written fic, or, in this case, poetry.)

vermin_disciple June 7 2010, 19:44:11 UTC

Comments like this really make my day. Thank you so much!

I was rather nervous about this because I haven't made a serious attempt at writing poetry since I was in high school (I'm heading off to grad school in a couple months, so that was a while ago). It was a lot of fun though, and I was more willing to experiment a little with it than I would have been then.

I'm glad you enjoyed it! <3