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viciousj60172

Burned

Jun 07, 2005 08:37

To Rudimentary Instances of Shaping the Heart -

April 2nd, 2004

Soft light stands still and in its wake follows her
fleeting steps,

She graces the ground, barely touching and floats to
me in ever-fading dreams,

Consciously aware of nothing, I breathe for the first
time and there is dawn in her eyes,

A million more futures unfold before me and I am once
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i don't think anyone really knows what they want... buscandome June 7 2005, 15:20:47 UTC

and if they do, they are unbelievably self assured.

my favorite line--- one i can relate to--- is this:

"I am guided not by what I know is right, but what might surely kill me.."

beautiful, Veej. thanks for sharing.

::hug::

Re: i don't think anyone really knows what they want... viciousj60172 June 7 2005, 16:11:01 UTC

wanna hear something funny? that line I just amended today. the previous no longer fit the mood I was going for.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

*hugs*
-VJ

I definitely don't know what I want... tragicblonde June 10 2005, 17:26:21 UTC

...except maybe everything. I'm spoiled that way. Heh. Romance isn't all that important to me. In fact, I find it rather cheesy. I just want to be thought of. Like, "I'm sorry you didn't land that exclusive contract today. I had my fingers crossed for you. But hey, fuck 'em, let's get drunk and drive through Taco Bell for a Chalupa, or SEVEN." Ah, now that's romance...

I LOVED the poem. I'm not a complete bitch. ;o)

Re: I definitely don't know what I want... viciousj60172 June 12 2005, 04:05:46 UTC

mmmmmm.... taco bell. dammit. now I'm probably going to have to go on a midnight run. anybody want anything? (I mean besides V's chalupas... I have to keep romance alive for her!)

I'm glad you liked the poem, I really like and that says a lot - because I never like my own work.

kenzy4u June 12 2005, 23:52:41 UTC

“I should have sent less flowers and found time to say ‘you look beautiful’, ‘I’m glad you’re here with me’, fixed your car when it was f-ing up etc. It really is the little stuff, nice words here and there, a kind gesture, romance is okay but practicality is better.”

I liked the poem very much.

::hugs::

Aye, very true auroradraco July 8 2005, 03:47:03 UTC

I think that applies to a lot of people. A very keen observation, I definitely understand what you mean. I just wish I had stumbled upon this piece of gold here sooner.

I am going to have to read this poem when I'm less sleepy though to make sure it hits right.

Good day.