Only Maybe He Does (merlin/arthur)

[vickevire]

Title: Only Maybe He Does
Author: vickevire
Pairings: Merlin/Arthur
Genre: angst, romance, modern!AU
Warnings: R for themes (non-con) rather than explicit content.
Word count: ~1270
Summary: Arthur has way too much baggage, and one evening he wryly states that he'll swear off women. Merlin can't get that notion out of his head.
Beta: gallifreycalls
Disclaimer: No

Comments

[babydracky]

Oh... I really like how you manage to write it. It is really interesting and I love how you described Arthur's character^^

:)

[vickevire]

Thanks! I'm very pleased that you liked Arthur. Ah, &hearts Arthur &hearts

Re: :)

[babydracky]

Would you mind if I friend you?
Cause I really like that story and I was on your LJ that you wrote more!^^

Re: :)

[vickevire]

Not at all. I write sporadically, and I've just started to dabble in fanvidding. Although - I feel I must warn you that this journal goes way back to a time before I even knew that the concept of beta-readers existed...

[ree_rhea]

the ending was so sweet after the heartbreak of Arthur leaving (and the horrible situation he found himself in with the kidnapping/hostage).

[vickevire]

Thank you! I aimed for a ening with hope, and with this premis, plus Arthur&Merlin, well, that just equals sweet, doesn't it?

[talkstosheep]

Ohman. Believe it or not, I really like the way you wrote this. Maybe it could use a tad bit of fleshing out, here and there, but not much. And I dunno, maybe I'm just reading too much into it, but it feels like there's an implication that they develop a pattern over the years (encounters followed by arthur's freakouts, with merlin waiting around and taking what he can get from arthur), which is sort of stunning.

Now this idea has spiraled all off in my head.

[vickevire]

Thanks! Well, with a style like this, I think the reader has to read a lot into it themselves.

If you have a distance to your story, that's really interesting. Like - your scenario, I didn't think about it (not consciously, at least), but the way I wrote it, it's totally possible. And interesting in a heartbreaking way. I'm much more awww-y in my mind, so I had Arthur dealing with it a bit when he went away, but that whole scenario I compressed to one sentence which in no way conveys any dealing on Arthur's part... heh. So go with your version!

Anyway, I was frustrated - not because I wanted to change the story I posted - but cause I wanted to write the same story (the full version in my head) in a whole different style, you know, the usual style, only I never write like that... like, I don't know how to do that. I don't know if I can - besides, what a freaking effort it would take...

Um. I'll stop my rambling now.

[talkstosheep]

All rambling welcome here.

I tend to write heartbreaking things anyway, not really sure why. I can never figure out a way to get to my happy endings, so I stop things in the most angsty moment possible usually. Still, happy endings are awesome, as long as I don't have to write them.

I have issues writing in normal people style too. I tend to write descriptive, narrative, epic-length short stories. So, I know what you mean about being frustrated, and how much effort it takes to break out of the box.

But if you decide to do it, let me know. I'd love to help, and I bet it'd be really good.

[vickevire]

Thanks! It's still bugging me a bit, so... you never know. I'll keep your offer in mind :)

[eosrose]

I really like the narrative style you used here. Different--and very engaging. Loved it!

[vickevire]

Thank you. I'm so glad that the style worked!

[archaeologist_d]

I liked the underlying tension in the story and the way Arthur was ashamed and afraid of his feelings for Merlin. Well done.

[vickevire]

Thanks!