Comments | victoriabuedo: That Dance

victoriabuedo

That Dance

Mar 23, 2009 11:40

That dance that draws two people together

The intimacy and closeness is revealed

By the touch, by the scene and by the body language

Many realise they themselves, are at the beginning of an-

Experience

The height of those two girls, and the extreme shortness

Of those two boys, do they hold the power within that dance?

Or are they simply toys?

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belrose March 24 2009, 03:18:11 UTC

Vicky! I like your poem. I love the repetition of "that" (as in "that dance" and "that boy" and "that couple"). The disconectedness works well with the scene and compliments it nicely. Well done on capturing the awkwarness of the Bar Mitzvah and the tweens mixed emotions. =] =] =]

xxBel

Week 4 Comment veronica_zouki March 29 2009, 05:22:35 UTC

Hey Victoria Buedo. Your poem was really well connected with the stimulus. You have a very distinct and interesting frame of mind, which is expressively conveyed throughout your poem. Many of the issues raised throughout your poem are really powerful in their representation of teenagers and their first dance with a girl or boy. Keep it up!