Comments | vienna_waits: Fic: Are You Lonesome Tonight?, G, Fraser at Depot

vienna_waits

Fic: Are You Lonesome Tonight?, G, Fraser at Depot

Apr 16, 2007 15:48

The stiff wind blowing off the prairies had teeth of ice, but Ben couldn’t be bothered to notice. He just stood there under the enormous oak in the courtyard, now bereft of leaves, its branches reduced to haunted dark fingers melting into the October night sky, and looked down at the letter in his left hand, slightly crumpled and sweaty from being ( Read more... )

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lilac_one April 16 2007, 19:55:33 UTC

Ow. Poor Benton. This is hurty in the best kind of way. Beautifully done.

vienna_waits April 16 2007, 19:58:20 UTC

Thank you! I have a real soft spot for Emo!Ben.

kill_claudio April 16 2007, 20:38:54 UTC

“You’ll regret it if you don’t.”

Oh, Ben. He's such a sucker for that line. And I adore the idea of him going through the training and then putting up with the punishment just to get in that one good punch and salvage some of his dignity. So very Fraser.

aingeal8c April 16 2007, 21:24:42 UTC

Ouch, poor Fraser. Wonderful last line, so very true.

Lovely, in a sad way.

vienna_waits April 16 2007, 21:34:39 UTC

Oops, aingeal, your comment came in just as I was responding to kill_claudio above you--sorry for the mixup! This comment is directed to you, the 9:28 comment is directed to her.

Thank you for your kind words!

aingeal8c April 16 2007, 22:11:29 UTC

No worries. It's great to see some Fraser gen fic for a change so thank you.

vienna_waits April 16 2007, 21:28:26 UTC

Yep, I used that line on purpose. Thanks for noticing. :-)

::nodsnodsnods:: Fraser's dignity is very important to him.

nos4a2no9 April 16 2007, 22:07:06 UTC

I too have a soft spot for Emo!Ben (I know, I know - we negate his pain with our sarcastic labels, but really. He's so emo) and this was a really good example of the way he gives in to melancholy and then allows people to exploit him. That "you'll regret it if you don't" works really well - it's an omnious line, and coupled with the cold prarie wind and the lonely setting of that moonlit courtyard I'm thinking something very bad (humiliating or painful) is in store for Ben at that party. Meep.

Fantastic stuff, as always.

vienna_waits April 16 2007, 22:22:59 UTC

I think so, too. This thing sat on my hard drive for ages because I wanted it to have a happy ending where he bonds with his troopmates at the party, but then when I dug it back out I said "OMG self, what were you thinking? Nothing good is going to happen with icy wind and inky darkness and Victoria lines!"

*blushes furiously* You are very kind.