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visiblemarket

Le Tourbillon de la Vie (2/12)

Mar 22, 2009 10:02

Title: Le Tourbillon de la Vie
Characters: Noah, Claude, Sandra
Rating: PG13
Warnings: A little violence.
Word Count: 1429
Spoilers: In this part not terribly much but for the story overall it really helps to have read the Golden Handshake series of the GN.
Disclaimer: Not mine, blah blah.
Summary: A Company trip to Paris takes a turn for the... ( Read more... )

sandra, le tourbillon de la vie, bennet, claude, fic:heroes

Comments 6

c_quinn March 22 2009, 14:53:16 UTC

It's probably the wrong reaction to keep waiting for Peter to find Claude, isn't it? [laugh] I can't help it: I'm conditioned for Plaude.

But I enjoyed this section very much. It's well-paced and your dialogue is excellent. Good work. :)

visiblemarket March 22 2009, 15:43:06 UTC

Heh, well, not to spoil things but I'll admit I had a bit of an urge to bring him in as well, which you will most likely be able to tell later. Because I too am conditioned for Plaude.

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

lotus0kid March 22 2009, 15:10:31 UTC

Action! Adventure! I really like how this is going, the pacing and the characterizations and everything. I'm oddly glad that you've included the cops and have them arrest Claude- so many action stories forget that. Sorry, I'd leave a better review but I gotta get off my butt and start dusting and vacuuming, so you'll have to do with my unorganized gut reactions. I'll do better next chapter.

visiblemarket March 22 2009, 15:44:42 UTC

I'm oddly glad that you've included the cops and have them arrest Claude- so many action stories forget that.

I just had to make things as difficult as possible for Claude. I'm like that.

I'm thankful for your reactions, wherever they come from ;) I'm glad you liked it.

cyberscribbles May 3 2009, 16:57:08 UTC

Ohh, invisible-boy Empath?

“Sirens,” he resisted the urge to slam his fist against something.

Yeah, I was thinking. Not the best thinking ahead there ay Claude. Clearly a lot better at immediate problems than future ones, isn't he? Guess Noah's the one that deals with those things.

Other than the whole kidnapping thing...

visiblemarket May 19 2009, 16:26:16 UTC

I couldn't help myself. Claude's not the same without an unexpectedly invisible empath to molest hate.

Claude has his own strengths and weaknesses. What with being invisible, I think he stops being cautious about a couple of things he should really be more cautious about.

Thank you!