I am no writer.. so help me out if ya can?

Sep 27, 2007 22:52

Ive had the honor to be asked by my buddy Tyson McAdoo to write his foreword for his first book.. I'm soooooo honored and blown away. I've loved his work and we have stayed friends from the beginning.. soooo I want this to be better.. this is his work http://www.tysonmcadoo.com/Read more... )

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Tweaked a bit... chris1036 September 28 2007, 03:39:09 UTC
I knew from the first time I saw Tyson McAdoo’s artwork that he would take over the world with his naughty pinup cartoon images. It didn’t take long before everyone knew who this crazy cat was. His ability to make his girls look even more extreme and badass... with their overarching super-high-heels, two tone hair, mischievous eyes, attitudes, and fully covered in killer tattoos. Tyson's work pops with color, which makes his work even more eye catching to his viewers. I’ve been watching this man work since the beginning and he keeps rolling them out, back to back, pushing his images to further express the bad girl that we have in all of us.

Just some slight changes so that it scans a little better, dear. A suggestion: talk a bit more about how he slowly evolves from shoot to shoot, rather than just 'rolling them out, back to back'. Would make it more personal... friend of yours and all.

Good luck with it, and congrats! Published again! lol

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Re: Tweaked a bit... vivaspinups September 28 2007, 03:43:30 UTC
thanks.. that does roll out better. xoxo

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Re: Tweaked a bit...more beelzebabe September 28 2007, 15:01:24 UTC
Chris' tweak is really good. I'd just change one sentence to make it a little more saucy and readable:

This: "His ability to make his girls look even more extreme and badass... with their overarching super-high-heels, two tone hair, mischievous eyes, attitudes, and fully covered in killer tattoos. "

To: He has the ability to make his models into badass glamour girls with overarching super high heels, two tone hair, mischievous eyes, sassy attitudes and killer tattoos.

Congratulations Viva !

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Re: Tweaked a bit...more brooklyngirl September 28 2007, 15:49:21 UTC
that sentence still needs a tweak I think
since the models he uses ARE badass glamour girls with overarching super high heels, two tone hair, mischievous eyes, sassy attitudes and killer tattoos - his skill is the ability to bring that into hyper reality and jump off the page.
I am not sure how to say that tho- I'm no good with words.
maybe its the loss of "look even more extreme and badass"?:
He has the ability to make his badass glamour girl models with overarching super high heels, two tone hair, mischievous eyes, sassy attitudes and killer tattoos somehow look even more extreme and badass with his use of line and color.

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How cool! sehrnett September 28 2007, 18:24:14 UTC
I want to meet him someday. But I also want to meet you, and look how well that has gone when we're in the same cities at the same time.

I like how the people here have edited it already.

I would make it a bit longer.

Maybe talk about the fact that you were one of his illustrations and how powerful and sexy it made you feel. You know, the bad girl in you!

BTW, did you like what I sent for the shoot?

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Re: How cool! vivaspinups September 28 2007, 18:46:28 UTC
yes i did.. loved the drawings on the box.. ha .. he didn't draw me personally.. but a few of my pieces inspired drawings. I sent him the writing already but I camped it up a bit more. We will meet someday.. been traveling alot lately.

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