TITLE: THREE

[vln_bbmfan]

TITLE: THREE
AUTHOR: VNapier
RATING: R (maybe)
FEEDBACK: Always. e mail me at BBMFAN@ZOOMINTERNET.NET
DISCLAIMERS: Standard disclaimers. The characters are not mine, but the story is.
SUMMARY: This was inspired by a line in Annie Proulx's original story, where one of the reasons Alma divorces Ennis is because of '...Ennis’s fishing trips once or

Comments

[fizzerbass]

Who cares what it was inspired by when it is as good as this?! (But thanks for the mention :D)

A tire iron, a dick, and a dead man...
Three fishing trips in one year - only in his dreams.

Shot me straight through the heart (but it felt so good!)

Thanks for sharing this with us. I really enjoyed reading it.

Fizzer

[vln_bbmfan]

Thanks! :-)

I just can't imagine the love it took for Jack to endure all those years of nothing getting better. Ennis never 'loosened' up, adapted, or anything, not even after 16 yrs of nothing bad happening. Not even after the divorce, did Ennis give an inch. And so many little things in everyday life that constantly reminded Jack that he would never have anything more from Ennis except what his own mind could dream up. A lesser man would have quit Ennis years before, but Jack kept hanging on as best he could.

Three

[greatmtn]

Vin, your writing owes nothing to anyone else. Even three fishing trips would not be enough. Almost like breathing 3 times in a year.

thanks

greatmtn

Re: Three

[vln_bbmfan]

Yes, it is easy to forget that Jack wasn't debilitated by the fear that consumed Ennis. While Jack could try to understand, he could never truly comprehend what Ennis was going through, nor could he use that fear to get him through the times between fishing trips.
In the end, after trying so hard and Ennis giving not an inch and shooting down every suggestion Jack ever made, I find it hard to believe that Jack didn't begin to wonder if it was him that was lacking, that if he was 'enough', Ennis would have been willing to fight his fears after so long of nothing bad happening to them.
And there were so many reminders around Jack in his every day life, almost taunting him with what he would never have. :-(

[120cassie]

Hi

This was good. Simple & effective idea.

Julie

[vln_bbmfan]

Thanks, Julie.
I don't usually have the ability to write anything short, so this was kind of nice for me, too.
Glad it worked. :-)

[sweetje]

This was short but to the point.
I did a double take at the last two statements, and in the last phrase, "only in his dreams" tugged at my heart strings.
This was very good. I liked it. :)
Debra

[vln_bbmfan]

I can just imagine Jack becoming more and more 'sensitive' to the world around him, where it could seem that everyone else at least had the chance to get what they wanted, when he could only dream of having more of Ennis.