Chapter 6: Forgive Us Our Trespasses

Jul 15, 2006 13:15

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: 39,000 to date
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 6: Forgive Us Our Trespasses
Authors: __tiana__ and sadiekate
Additional Characters: Lamb, Luke
Rating: R for ( Read more... )

keith, tiana_kate, back-up, casey, veronica, all fall down, logan, jp, lamb, tiana__, sadiekate, luke

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afrocurl July 15 2006, 18:13:53 UTC
Ti and Kate--this rocks so hard!!!!

I was expecting a serious case of angst today, and instead I get tons of banter and snark and Lamb in stupid costumes, with a bit of angst in for good measure!!!

Ok--now that I've expressed my love for this, on the whole, let me say that the Keith and Veronica scenes were great. It was wonderful to see them back into their old ways but still have that awkwardness from everything else.

Logan's party also amused me to know end. It would have been nicer for Veronica to stay, but it still hurt Logan (as the angst at the end gets across really well.) When did Logan get to be so emotionally stable?

Kate--I know that you're responsible for the naked mudflaps and The Rosenbaum, but they were wonderful.

This story needed a break from all the death, and this was wonderful!!!

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__tiana__ July 16 2006, 04:45:01 UTC
Thanks! Glad you liked it! You know the both of us really enjoy the snark and the banter, so this chapter was a lot of fun to write.

Believe it or not, I was responsible for the naked lady mudflaps, but Kate was most certainly responsible for The Rosenbaum reference. I wholly endorsed that addition. :)

Thanks again!

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sadiekate July 18 2006, 03:51:39 UTC
Stop being so circumspect, Ti. Tell the nice commenters that you have naked lady mudflaps on your car.

Of course, I have naked Rosenbaum mudflaps on my Camry, so ...

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__tiana__ July 18 2006, 03:54:23 UTC
Not just any naked lady, either! *leers at you* HEE.

(And um, the fact that you just called me circumspect RIGHT as I was typing a comment on your LJ saying I was being circumspect? YIPES. Braintwin!)

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juneaddams July 15 2006, 18:16:27 UTC
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!! New chapter!

This is why I always refresh livejournal page every five minutes....Amazing. I love that L/V worked their snark together against Lamb. I love Keith and V working together like in 'Lord of the Blings' again. And I love the Rosenbaum shout-out. Chapter five is beautifully dark with a glow of light and this one is funny and light with a just a tiny shade of darkness, and they balanced each other nicely.

Awesome, you two!

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__tiana__ July 16 2006, 04:46:30 UTC
Thanks so much! We figured that no matter how much friction Veronica and Logan are experiencing, they can ALWAYS put that aside to snark at Lamb. :) We were definitely going for light with a touch of angst, so it's great to hear that came across so well.

Thank you!

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sadiekate July 18 2006, 03:50:03 UTC
Thanks so much!

It was sort of our tribute to the series, trying to work in references to plot points on the actual show, like with Keith and Veronica working together. I'm glad you enjoyed!

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catteo July 15 2006, 18:43:30 UTC
Ooooh this was good. Trust you two to write the chapter with this in it:
Can I help it if Michael Rosenbaum portrays him as a complex and compelling villain, with a touch of pathos, and still looks good doing it? Donny, you should really check him out. You might pick up a few pointers, if you decide to shift away from incompetence and go the evil mastermind route. Laughing. My ass. OFF.

Thought you did a really good job of continuing the tension between Veronica and Keith. Even though they're trying to do the daddy-daughter thing it's not really happening.

I felt so sorry for Logan at the end. He just wants to know what's going on in her head. Why must she always run away from him. WHY? Yes, I am frustrated.

Great snarkage all the way through the Lamb scene. And HE WAS WEARING A JOURNEY T-SHIRT. You guys RAWK. Well done!

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__tiana__ July 16 2006, 04:48:17 UTC
Oh yes. When we were brainstorming the chapter, it was most firmly decided that some kind of Lex/Rosenbaum reference was required and Kate wrote this one. Hilarious!

Glad you liked all those parts - and yes, the Journey t-shirt. Hee. THANKS!

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sadiekate July 18 2006, 03:57:12 UTC
I know that was so very self-indulgent to not only include a Rosenbaum shout-out, but also to write it very much in my own voice. Thank god Ti humors me with my nonsense.

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__tiana__ July 18 2006, 03:59:12 UTC
Luckily, YOUR voice sometimes sounds like Logan's voice, so it all worked out. PLUS, I indulge, humor and otherwise do whatever you want on a regular basis. Heh.

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__tiana__ July 16 2006, 04:48:49 UTC
Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed the banter. :)

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sadiekate July 18 2006, 04:06:26 UTC
Yay! Glad you enjoyed it!

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perfect__weapon July 15 2006, 19:38:26 UTC
This story is what makes me look forward to the weekend, haha.
What an incredible chapter.
Firstly I was so happy to see Keith and Veronica spending some time together in the beginning. I really love Keith and I hate that there is a strain in their relationship.
Secondly, I loved the Lamb scene. I love how he is wearing a Journey shirt and how Logan played off that. Oh, and also I loved Veronica's and Logan debate on who Lamb had a crush on, that had me in tears practically.
The last bit really depressed me though hopefully Veronica will stop running and just tell Logan how she feels!

this is love.
really.

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__tiana__ July 16 2006, 04:50:40 UTC
Thank you very much! Having the reader almost in tears laughing is always a goal! I'm happy to hear you enjoyed this - and that you are enjoying the fic as a whole.

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sadiekate July 18 2006, 04:06:59 UTC
Thanks so much!

BTW, gorgeous icon.

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