Chapter 14: Ice, Ice, Baby (Part B)

[sarah_and_lizzy]

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: 109,131
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 14: ICE, ICE, BABY
Author: herowlness and sarah_p
Additional Characters: Casey, Dick, JP, Madison, Susan Knight,

Comments

[reve_silencieux]

Heee! A figure skating case! Oh man...were the subtle remarks that Veronica made about skating meant to imply that she's skated before? If so...heh. Sounds like another blonde on TV.

I love Logan and Wallace with the code names. That was SO Sarah's part. And if not, wow has she rubbed off on people! Toyfic! Er...sorta.

Great chapter, and I'm glad Veronica at least let Keith in on something.

[herowlness]

My original plan for this chapter had Veronica going undercover pretty much how she original suggested to Joey - as a competitor. Of course, kantayra has a good working knowledge of the figure skating circuit, and she made it clear to me and Sarah (much in the way that Joey made it clear to Veronica) that that just wasn't possible. But, yeah, we figured that she and her mom probably skated together a bit when she was younger. :)

And while Sarah has rubbed off on me SOMEWHAT, the code names were ALL her idea. And they worked awesomely, I think. :) (<-- one of the ways in which Sarah has rubbed off on me, as I know make smilies like ALL THE TIME!OMG :)

Thanks for the feedback - I'm really glad that you enjoyed this!

[sarah_p]

You are GOOD, because we totally cut a part about how Lianne used to take V skating she was little...and, yes, it was all very BUFFYESQUE. NICE CATCH :). *hands you prize*

Dude, you KNOW Logan would so use Ninja Turtle code names. I TOTALLY wanted his to be "Snake Eyes," but I guess Lizzy thought that was a little TOO obvious. Heh ;). IT'S TOYFIC WITHOUT BEING TOYFIC! We're cheating the system!

I'm realllly glad you commented on the Veronica/Keith part, though. I mean, while we've been outlining the tension for FOURTEEN CHAPTERS, OMG, I think it's still important to show that he still is her father, and there still ARE some things that are out of her hands. Not that it'll keep her out of trouble for long, but just enough for a fluffy chapter here and there ;).

I'm so glad you took the time to read this massiveness (even if it did cut in on your fic writing time...EEEH). LOVE, my dear. LOVE!

:)

[afrocurl]

Ah--a figure skating MotW from you two!! I should have guessed that, but it's still very amusing

[herowlness]

Okay, sorry about the delay on responding, but Sarah and I were busy totaling up your scores. :) I think she'll be sharing those with you before too long .... :) Some of these scenes were completely reworked so Sarah and I both ended up writing parts of them. :)

Ah--a figure skating MotW from you two!! I should have guessed that, but it's still very amusing.
=nods= This is my second foray into skating fanfiction, but this one is a bit less cracked out. Still fun though. :)

Grace disappearing: I was very confused at first and then it sort of fell into place. It stood out, but I liked that arc for Keith to have to get back to Fresno to deal with those missing girls and something else.
Why were you confused? Did you just sense that something was off and it wasn't related to the arc with the missing girls? Still, one of the things that I liked about writing this chapter was adding a sense of human error to their cases. I mean, they incorrectly presumed that Grace's case was related to the other disappearances, so Keith made some

[afrocurl]

The Grace situation was just a shock to the system, moreso than anything else. I understood the connections once it happened, but I thought first thoughts were important, right?

Alanna isn't as posessive, that's very true. It's really nice to see that Logan and Wallace can be friends here, really.

Age explanation--good points! I'm just being the silly Californian and wondering what middle school starts the early here. Pardon me while I sink into the ocean soon....

Aww, no Corny. That is sad.

Oh, I know that if there had been more on that case, this would have been much longer, so I'm not too upset. It's nice to have a break from it, even if only for one week.

Your Sway just came on my iTunes..Hee!!! You must explain how this song was helping you write this chapter later.

Oh--I didn't spot the Jensen reference either. *hands head in shame*

[herowlness]

I owe you a real response, but my brain is quickly escaping. Tomorrow.

But, as for the Evan explanation, there's this video, from Tornio. (the post-competition exhibition)

The copy that I have on my computer is much prettier - better resolution and stuff. But the uploaded version works too. :) Just ... excuse the Chinese talk or whatever - what matters is the music and the routine. =D

[saramitra]

awww wallace and logan bonding. sooo funny. "leonardo, do you copy?" hehehe. and this line?:
"Watching a bunch of dudes run around in spandex really made me thirsty. Freud would have a field day with that one, but I'm just going with it."
SO logan. :D love it.
and i gotta say, i figured out the whole ben thing a while back. :P But the MotW was fun, especially the return of madison. and you gotta love dick, all sad that he hasnt gotten laid. *sigh*
great chap guys!!

[herowlness]

I'm really happy to hear that you figured out the MOTW early on. I mean, not that we wanted to make it obvious, but if it's so obscure and underdeveloped, what fun is that? I considered writing Ben with a lisp early on, or making some reference to it, but it just looked out of place, AND I hate writing the whole phoenetic speaking thing. =shudders=

But, yeah, Logan and Wallace are a blast to write, and they always seem to have so much fun together .. How does that happen ... ? ;)

Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed it! =D

[sarah_p]

HEE. Wallace and Logan together are FUN, and...come on. We all know that, deep down, Logan's got a thing for spandex ;). Or maybe I just WISH he did. WHATEVER.

It's really nice to hear that you figured the MotW out early, because that means that we made it logical! And things worked out the way they were supposed to! WHEE!

Thank you so much for rocking and reading and commenting :).

[la623]

Wow...this was great...can't wait to read more!

[sarah_p]

Yay! I'm so glad that it worked for you :). Thank you for reading!

:)

S.O.R.R.Y.

[oliviamars]

I want to apologize for not leaving a comment on this particular chapter. Oh well... winter term of university is about to start in... wait... let me count... exactly 2 days and I am so lost because I'm a freshman... fresh-woman. *g

Re: S.O.R.R.Y.

[sarah_p]

See, and I'M sorry for taking so long to comment back to you! But! You commented at ALL, so no matter how long it took, that makes you awesome :). It's so nice to know you're enjoying the fic! With a group project like this, there's so much coordinating that goes into it, knowing it's WORKING helps. A LOT.

First I wanna say that it was sooooooooo cool that chapter 14 had 2 parts!!! Wheee! I was pleased like a little girl at Christmas.

THIS is the best ever, because I know that sometimes people are turned off by long fics, but...we couldn't tell it in only one post! And, dude, MP3 PLAYER ANALOGIES WILL GET YOU EVERYWHERE ;).

The chapter itself... hmmm... it wasn't as thrilling as the last ones but I bet you have to write chapters like that to increase the whole suspense of your fic.You've got it! This chapter is a little spot of fluff in the whole mystery arc...we did a little with it, but tried to go for fun and light instead of OMGDEATH. Cause, really, we all know there'll be more scary mystery stuff....might as well