Fic: Make Her Fly (Dick, Dick/Mac) PG-13

[citygirlheart]

Title: "Make Her Fly"
Characters/Pairings: Dick, Mac, Dick/Mac, brief mention of Logan/Veronica, and allusions to Cassidy.
Summary: "You’ve learned that lives can be ruined and children can be broken in more ways than you could ever possibly count."
Rating: PG-13, to be safe.
Spoilers: up to 2x22, Future-fic.
Word Count: 1,287
Notes: My first VM

Comments

[citygirlheart]

Aw, thank you! I really like that line, as well - it took some tinkering to get it to feel "right," but I really wanted that part to resonate.

=)

[afrocurl]

For your first piece in VM, I really like this, and think it worked really well.

I'm always a big fan of Dick being pensive and thinking through his actions, and I really love the use of the second person POV here.

Use of the items can be thematic, so don't worry about it.

I really enjoyed this.

[citygirlheart]

Thank you! Of all the characters, I never in a million years would have thought that my first fic would be from Dick's perspective, haha.

I don't really know why I went with the second person POV - it just came out that way. Personally, I think it's the easiest to write in.

Yay. =)

This is concrit

[tigereyes320]

first of all I really liked the premise and the story.

I have to say the first part seems a bit muddled.

Once you get to this line 'When she finds out that she’s pregnant, something rises in your stomach, fluttering to the base of your throat. It’s hope.' From that point onward it only gets better.

But before that I really don't get why they are married, or why they are together.Other than that like I said I really enjoyed the fic.

Re: This is concrit

[citygirlheart]

Thank you for the feedback! =)

I completely agree - the first part is sort of all over the place. Things didn't really "click" for me until the end part, like you said.

I was trying to get across how they were together, at least in the beginning, because they understood each other in a way that no one else could.

[sodapop_09er]

I must say. I applaud you.

I definately had black balloon playing while I read this, so I got the emotional appealx2. :) Very amazing.

I love the emotion you put into Dick, and the response from both Mac and their child.

Great outlook. :)

[citygirlheart]

aw! yeah, i was listening to "black balloon" on repeat while I wrote this, and I think it really helped capture the dark mood.

but yes. thanks so much!