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Fic: Our Darkest Wishes

Feb 15, 2011 16:33

Our Darkest Wishes, part 1/2 but this first part can also be read as stand-alone-oneshot
Author: voiceinahead
Rating: this chapter's maybe G but later at least PG-13 for now
Pairing: Edmund/Caspian
Warnings: slash: you know, Caspian might end up kissing Edmund, and they're both boys, so get the hell out if it's not your cup of tea! Spoilers! for !Voyage of the ( Read more... )

slash, fandom: narnia, fanfiction, pairing: caspian/edmund

Comments 8

blaze_nightstar February 15 2011, 22:05:45 UTC

Aww... this is good, and I'm glad to know that I'm not the only person who's mind went to Edmund when Caspian said his bit about 'darkest wishes'. :) Nice fic.

voiceinahead February 16 2011, 00:14:54 UTC

Thanks! And you know what's the best part? There's about twice as much more of this in my school notebook not yet edited and waiting for me to type on computer! :D I just got tired here and it kind of seems to be in two parts anyhow since there's that dark isle battle in between. And I'll have to add the sword talk there too if I'll just find the exact dialogue for it.

blaze_nightstar February 16 2011, 08:14:54 UTC

Oh awesome! I do hope you put the rest up, I'd love to see how you continue this. I know what you mean about exact dialogue too - I ended up taking notes at the cinema.
Also, my main reason for reply - <3 your icon!

voiceinahead February 28 2011, 10:50:38 UTC

Thanks for review! The rest is up there now. But the smut is not - yet. I'm still waiting for that inspiration to come to me... Maybe it will, in time. And if I have a boring lecture...

Thanks for the complements! I like my icon too, although I hope to find the picture somewhere in better quality and then make another icon.. :D

eijifujiryoma February 28 2011, 08:53:10 UTC

The first thing I'd like to mention is how hilarious I found the ending to be, although that's more me than anything :P Since it's implied Edmund would be what Caspian might be up against, it just seems funny to me, coz like...imagining a sea serpent-sized Edmund attacking the DT. XDDDD

Or some sort of voice whispering in Caspian's mind that he should just spirit Ed away from everything so they'll never be separated, just the two of them. Now THAT is a hell more appealing.

Can't wait for next part!

voiceinahead February 28 2011, 10:48:28 UTC

Oh dear, sea serpent-sized Edmund... I know what you mean with funny now! I was kinda going towards the Jadis-kinda-torment that Edmund went through there... but it's always just up to the reader to imagine... and when you have readers like you...

hehe, no, not seriously.

Next part might or might not come for this. I'll maybe add some smut to the end if I get an inspiration. :D But mostly now it's all there plot-wise. I don't like writing too long stories.

flirtyfroggy May 13 2011, 22:06:46 UTC

I like this, it's a great little moment to pick up on. I especially like this:

Caspian looked at him for a long moment and Edmund thought he could almost see two emotions battling in Caspian's head and looked at him pleadingly. He had to know, if it was important, he just had to.Finally Caspian seems to come to a conclusion, he gulps and clears his throat looking nervous and says, very quickly;

"It's you."

The sudden change in tense from past to present was not so great, though ;). It's more than a little jarring.

*goes to read part 2*

voiceinahead June 13 2011, 20:14:05 UTC

Thanks for the review! And thanks for noticing that tense-issue :S I'll have to re-read the whole thing now, I noticed another mistake there also... ah, well, originally my excuse for writing fanfiction was to learn write better English! And it has been working!