Fanfic: Pokemon: Gaining from Loss - Chapter 8

Oct 25, 2015 19:00

[Gaining From Loss] - Chapter 8 (Final)
Length: Chapter - Complete
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Adventure/Romance
Warning(s): BL, Swearing
Character(s): Ash, Paul, others
Pairing(s): Paul x Ash
Summary: After thrown into certain situations, Ash and Paul must work together to get back what was lost and make it out alive.
Author's Notes: This is the ( Read more... )

fanfic: pokemon

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zin0 October 26 2015, 16:21:50 UTC
MISAAAAAAAA!!!!!!! OHMYGOOOOD YOU FINISHED IT!! You could have warned me a little i almost had a heart attack this morning when I saw what you had posted (and then ofc was late for school because there was NO WAY i was gonna wait any longer before reading this)! I was just talking to Kirika yesterday how I didn't know what to offer you so you'd write coma just one more time and then this happens. I can't even begin to describe how happy i was and still am, I knew my waiting wasn't for nothing! Alright, since this is probably my favorite multichapter comafic I am going to comment the whole fic now that it's finished, because my earlier comments from years ago are awful and short ( ... )

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zin0 October 26 2015, 16:23:46 UTC
What I probably like the most in your Paul (ok i like all the things when it comes your paul) is the way he shows his kindness. Like little things - Ash is hungry - Paul gets him some apples, but in a way that still seems like he's pissed off because of Ash. But again, he still acts nice, and no matter how hard he tries to act like Ash is just a total burden, he still finds himself helping his rival all the time. (Yeeep yeep so he needed Ash's help as well because no pokemon with him BUT STILL he could be colder if he wanted, but he isn't!) Aaaand I like how Ash is still a but bummed he has to hang out with Paul of all people, and not see this as a 100% opportunity to befriend his rival or something. AND I ADORE when Ash is left speechless when Paul shows him some kindness (apple scene for example), like he's just stunned the other can actually be nice on his own way (also it's kinda sad that Ash thinks that Paul never shows him any kindness, I mean yeah I get why he thinks so, but still).

Paul is Paul, no matter what you’re going ( ... )

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zin0 October 26 2015, 16:25:09 UTC

“Don’t let go.” Paul muttered.

Ash thought he meant “don’t let go of your breath” but then the grip on his wrist slid down to his hand and suddenly he felt horrible for thinking Paul would betray him.

THAT PART OHGODDD. the "don't let go", I just HNGDKFSDLSKDJKF SERISOULSY HNGGGG. I guess part of that part's impact is the fact that Paul's been pretty unsocial with Ash so far and then suddenly he's holding his hand and telling him not to let go. Also I feel like this kinda the turning point, where Ash stops thinking Paul is ... eeh what's the word again... well "bad" guy and starts seeing that he can actually be nice. Anyway, this whole end to the fourth chapter is awesome and I send you million kilos of cookies for writing it!!!

Ash didn’t notice until now that their hands were still clasp together. He felt a little thump in the back of his heart but he just figured it was from the adrenaline of being chased and escaping.

Continued handholding even when the danger is already over<333 And I understand Ash, if Paul was holding my ( ... )

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zin0 October 26 2015, 16:26:12 UTC
THEN MORE HANDHOLDING, MISAAAA MY WEAK SPOTS!!! Heheee i like how it's Paul the both times that wants to hold hands (Ash wouldn't probably dare to even suggest it). It's just so sweet!! how they say, the harder the tsun, sweeter the dere. Deffo the case here! And excuses like "you don't how to walk, hold my hand" makes it even better and PAUL NOT LOOKING AT ASH! So he doesn't think it's purely so that they can walk faster BDD HNGG ASh getting the huge dokis bc of their handholding! Yes the ending of chapter six is also one of my fav moments in this fic, because Paul's reddening ears! (uuung i am almost out of energy sorry if the comment gets crappy for now on)

alright my comment for the seventh chapter was somewhat decent so i am just gonna say that the top moments of this chapter were when a) ash finally understood paul better (that he too cared about his pokemon) b)

The Veilstone trainer shook his head from the mental image but for some reason he continued to stare at the water dripping down Ash’s tan neck. Paul swallowed the ( ... )

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kirika_desu May 24 2016, 22:27:23 UTC
i don't know why i didn't leave a review the first time i read this chapter bc i'm pretty sure i read it the day you posted it a few monthes ago lol. but here i am now!

this feels nostalgic because i'm sure this fic is one of the first shinsato fics i've read when i became a fan of the ship! (actually, i became a fan in may 2012 or a bit before, so it's been four years now, woaah time flies by! and they're still my numero uno otp <3)

so yeah, thank you for finishing the fic <33 i love how you don't really rush things between them, friendshippy scenes with hints of dokis is always so cute with them lol. btw, when shinji said "you trusted me back then, why can't you now?", idk why but it made me think of sasuke?? anyway, this line was a killer. i also liked when shinji talked to pikachu (also the "tell pikachu i said thank you" was cute!), and the scene when they all had breakfast together, it reminded me of one of clunker's comics! i liked how shinji silently acknowledges takeshi and hikari, by nodding to them, it's a nice touch ( ( ... )

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