[Fic] it's on and on (Torchwood)

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Title: it's on and on
Author: oregonblondie
Fandom: Torchwood
Character/Pairing: Well, I wrote it in my head as Gwen/Jack, but it could be taken as Gwen/Owen, I suppose.
Summary: mostly it's just that the emerald isle can't do anything right most of the time, not even the postcard christmas with twinkling icicles and drifts to get your car stuck in. Inspired by

Comments

[pinkamethyst]

That was totally different to anything I've read in this fandom before, and really appealed to me. That might just be because I love people kind of experimenting and doing individual things and, y'know, being original and all that jazz. But, yeah, enough of my ramblings.

This felt like Jack/Gwen to me. I can't see this really being Gwen/Owen; doesn't really seem like their relationship. I love Gwen's thoughts. Somehow, it come across as quite confused. Is that what you were aiming for? She's still torn between a world of movie-style happiness, where boy meets girl and they fall in love and live happily ever after, and the reality of what she's doing. It's all so beautifully sad, but so perfect.

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[oregonblondie]

Well thanks! I'm very new to the show and fandom, so I haven't really immersed myself much in the fic. In fact, I think I wrote this w/o any internets, so I had only to show to guide me. ^_^

And thank you for your feedback. I was sort of going for confused!Gwen, since that's a lot of what I feel from her character. After all this crazy crap she's been through, but she's still herself, sort of a dreamer. Thank you again!

[oltha_heri]

This is really wicked, I like both ships, but this line to me just made it seem like Owen: "because he really is just a boy just like you're just a girl." I just can't see Jack as a boy (actually serious Jack relationships I find kinda squicky). I really like it though, I usually find it hard to right with names, so love to see someone else who has a love of pronouns (although I actually really hate pronouns... and it's late, sorry). Your voice and the beat is really good. I like how each paragraph is started with it's, it's very poetic. For some writing I would say shake it up a bit, but with the rest the pace and repetition just works so well. I see a lot of this stuff for BSG but never for Torchwood and I really love it so I am glad to see it. And the moment it gets late I start writing really long comments.

[oregonblondie]

Guh, I live for long comments like yours! Thanks so much for your response, and your compliments. It sounds like I wrote what I was aiming for. I have a writer frined who has a style similar to this (disjointed, vauge-ish) and it was a challenge for me to write like her.

[runonmoonlight]

I also, really enjoyed this. It was the flow of it -- like she's trying to sort something out in her head maybe but not consciously, it's just images and feelings and thinking something about a song and giggling about some things and then being sad the next moment because it reminds you of something else.

I love that the way it sounds in my head too, it's not just the words, it's the rhythm of it.

Anyways, lovely :)