Forever you - Chapter 10

[warriorangel24]

Part 10

The feeling of the hot water on her muscles was so soothing; Willow could feel her body finally relaxing under the shower. Last night had been a roller coaster of emotion she felt as if she had been run over by truck, a truck loaded with news. So much to process “Tara is back, so beautiful…Oh God, last night dressed in that nightgown…wow…she

Comments

[pens_co927]

A few things to point out:

"Willow took a sit on an armchair facing the bed"...sit should be seat

“Okay, I told I smelled something gooood”...there should be a you before the second I

I like the flow of the story. You do a good job of voicing the characters as if I were watching a Buffy episode.

[warriorangel24]

thank you. This story is not beta read, so there will be a few mistakes ;)

[pens_co927]

I figured as much, which is why I said something. I know that as a writer, it's hard to see mistakes in your own works because you've looked at it so much

[xxmadlaxx]

Ooh, much better Kenney in this chapter