Dee of the Damned Chapter 4-6 Fini

[betafish]

Title: Dee of the Damned
Author: Betafish
Rating: Adult
Summary: Most of the world denies the supernatural. They do not know of a world in which there are slayers, demons, or other supernatural elements. They believe the world, like themselves, to be fairly average. Reality is mundane, or so Dee believes until she is kidnapped and reborn

Comments

[brunettepet]

This was smart and funny, and the characters you created drew me in. The class outcasts being cast into this bizarro world were fresh and believeable even when they were doing unbelieveable things. You gave these characters life and charm right from the beginning. Dee's dry sense of humor and the way it followed through her transformation was the thread that kept this story whole. This was really wonderful.

Thank you for the review

[betafish]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate in-depth feedback. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Part 2 is underway, but it will take me a while to complete - I'm a slow writer, with almost NO free-time.

Best,
Betafish

[slinkypsychokit]

Finally! Finally got to finish it! Wheeee! Now, for the review-age:

I loved it, of course! Jessie was just too funny with her glass licking and Giselle sounds like a total hottie! Loved the "lack of impulse control". Peter- now why did I think he was a whimp even during the nightclubbing at the beginning of the fic? Hmmm..

Phil, on the other hand- WANT HIM NOW!

K, that is all...

Thanks much Slinky!

[betafish]

So glad you liked it! Don't worry, there's more coming. I think athenewolfe would kill me if I stopped here. Besides, they're just getting started!

...and don't worry. There'll be a lot more Phil. ;-)

Thanks,
Betafish

[vamptastica]

Ok i got this from Athena's site and may i say, wow. And YUMMY and hot and woo hoo. And just really really original and interesting and well fun.

I loved that Dee shed her "shackles" both physically and metaphorically after being with Jessie. Almost as if that still human part of her that loves her friends was combating her demony self.

Billy, poor guy, all confuzzled there but still liking the girl lovin's *giggles* yep poooooooooor Billy huh? But why wouldn't he come out to his friends hmmm? I mean to Phil sure but his friends? Interesting....

And Phil is just, well interesting. Bright, quite, snarky, hmmmmm a bit williamesque if you ask me. *grins* but I'd love to delve into his background a bit.

Oh and peter and giselle. Will we get to see them again? Cause i'd love to know why peter was such a blind follower, and just learn everything about Giselle cause she's just too cool!!

Ok i'm done, i'm friending, i'm pimping. :) *pokes lightly* updates soon yes?

(and yes i know i sound like yoda)*grins*

i loved it.

Thank you for the insightful review

[betafish]

Thank you very much, I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

I'm also glad you noticed some of the use of metaphor, I was hoping it wouldn't be too subtle and go unnoticed.

Billy, well, he's a complex and confused character. His story is going to be slow to develop but that's necessary (and won't come to a head until Part 3). Don't worry, your questions will be answered!

Phil and Peter will both get fleshed out more in the rest of the story, I think you'll find Peter's story to...nevermind. No spoilers here. :->

Giselle...you will definitely be seeing a lot more of Giselle. She is a seriously key element to the entire story and to how everything unfolds...and unravels.

More as soon as it's done, but I'm not posting anything until I have Part 2 finished (read as: the next 12,000 or so words), so please be patient. I'll make sure it's worth it! :-)

Updating Part 2 to L.J., I soon will be! ;-)

Thank you again,

Betafish

Re: Thank you for the insightful review

[vamptastica]

never a problem sweetie. Just to let you know...i'm really really bad at remembering...um..well anything. so if it takes a bit for me to get back around NEVER FEAR I am like cheerleader, go you, chicky of the lj newbie writer supporters. *grins and shakes pom poms* I do look at my flist occasionally *coughs* but it's kind HUGE so I usually pop into peoples sites here and there.

and yep, can not wait. If ever you need more cheerleading or athena needs some back up..let me know!!! *grins*

Re: Thank you for the insightful review

[betafish]

Thank you for the Rah-age!

Please feel free to add me betafish

Bisous!
the Betafish

[raemcn]

Fantastic, magnificent, amazing, smart, funny, sexy, just plain hot. Your characters drew me in and wouldn't let me go. I love shy, unnoticed Dee becoming something so much more vibrant and vivid. I love her two best friends being freaked, but still right there with her every step of the way. The demon Giselle is absolutely amazing. Phil is cool, and I can't wait to find out more about Peter the servant.

Will be waiting patiently for more, well actually I'll probably be biting my nails and begging for the next part. *hugs*

Thank you for reviewing!

[betafish]

Questions will be answered!

I'm currently about 7,800 words into Part 2, and counting. As soon as Part 2 is finished I will post that as well.

So glad you liked it! Lots of twists and turns (and more sex, of course) ahead.

Big Hugs,
the Betafish

Dee of the Damned

[anonymous]

loved it. fun read. thank you, vladt

Re: Dee of the Damned

[betafish]

So glad you liked it. Working on Part 2 right now.
I'll be finished with it soon. Hopefull before I return home from Izmir.

Best,
Micah