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I have no idea where i am going with this.
I got an A in English, and i am totally psyched. All my paper grades were C's. I'm kind of hoping my final paper is what established my ultimate A.
Music is clearly acceptable due to my lack of attendance.
Child Psychology as well, but because i hardly studied.
The other two.. were pieces of cake because the professors were lenient.
AND..dont read any further. I'd just liek to keep this as a reference.
however, if you are itnerested, which i highly doubt, by all means go ahead...
Carissa Frazier 00759768
ENL 102
Mrs. Burt
May 15, 2006
Quenching a Thirsty Mind
“Close your eyes. Drift into a restful sleep. It’s perfectly simple.”
“NO! NO! NO! NO! NO! You can’t. and you must not! You have a final paper due tomorrow and you haven’t anything written!”
“Too bad, I can’t think of anything anyway.”
“Well…Get to it, you big loaf!”
“Ughhh…I guess it would be a good idea, but I really can not keep my eyes open.
There’s not enough time left to critically analyze pieces of paper containing words I’ve written a while ago. I can’t do it.”
“ Well then, just write about what you think. Write whatever strikes your mind right at this very moment!”
Title, where art thou? You may not know what to call this right away, but once you’ve read through the journey of an essay written, you will. You truly will. Please stay awake; you can do it. You’ve done it before, even if it wasn’t anything that could speak for your greatest strength, it was something. It spoke for, at least, a piece of you, quite possibly your conforming mind set at that time. You didn’t have anything better to write about so you simply wrote of what other people told you or what you already knew. You didn’t take the time to dig deeper and see that there was more to the text than words. Something called negative space (a term I learned from last semester as an art student) rings a bell and has come to be a popular term in the field of figuring out. Merely reading a text isn’t nearly enough to quench the thirst of a dehydrated mind. What really speaks between the lines are things such as: word choice, connotative meaning, reaction, mood, feeling, known experience of an author by research, or the time frame of a publishing.
In all reality, everything and anything can be thrown into the mixing bowl of inspiration that bakes an author’s cake. Up until recently, I hardly considered such aspects as contribution to the “big picture” meaning of the text. Ernest Hemingway clearly wrote about what he knew as himself and perfected that through impersonations in characters and people he has associated himself with as others. In Edwin Robinson’s “The Mill,” historical content is vital to comprehending the entirety of the poem. “There are no millers any more,” because of the industrial revolution and the replacing of humans with machines. Without knowing this, we wouldn’t have discovered the true meaning of the miller’s suicide. Other works, such as: “The Gift of Sweat” or “Orientation” are examples of experience driven spurs of literature. Everything and anything can have an impact on literature and vice versa.
As for myself, I can honestly say that the first three essays I have written are the essays I impulsively plunged into. Being a procrastinator of countless papers, school work, etc. I had little time to think of how to relate a text to something outside of its words. I, for one, am a very indecisive being. A few times, I start by writing whatever word plucks at my brain first. From there, I just elaborate. However, I start over, cross out, and stare blankly for minutes on end. Until finally, there is nothing left to do but to base my thoughts upon those of other students and “dive into the healing pool.” Class collaboration has only led me to believe that the persuasive arguments of others are well developed and easily accepted as excellent topics for papers. So goes, my conformity.
Individual creativity, on the other hand, awakened me late in the semester. I realized that being a turtle rather than a hare was a better way to attempt a paper in order to leave a lasting impression. I didn’t want to write papers just to get them out of the way and under my belt. I wanted to slowly but surely write to leave behind a piece of my own, opinionated self. After the fat draft of essay #4, I realized how little of an effort I put into figuring out what needed to make my paper purposeful. Every other paper I had read that wasn’t my own presented individuality and coherence behind a focused mind. The first two drafts I brought to class were but mere summaries of the text I had chosen to write about, with little outside information. My peer reviews suggested I do some serious revision, and it finally hit me that I was that horrible rabbit, racing through the fields.
With the will, I found the way to slow down and fix what had gone awry. I completely scratched what was left of my fat draft and researched and edited and applied every little thing I could into formulating a new and exciting paper. For some strange reason, I found it easy to connect a text with nature or experience, hopefully allowing my audience to easily engage themselves into where I was about to take them. I didn’t want my paper to be just another boring analysis of some story that nobody else got the chance to read. I wanted to lure interest by hooking the reader with a twisted opening line. From then on, I made it a point to commence excitement at the very beginning of the essay and sprinkle it throughout its entirety. The conclusion would serve to put the delightful cherry on top.
Looking over my first few papers, I couldn’t possibly select any as an elective essay due to the fact that they were all written in rabbit form. Essay #1 is all about shift in tone, how it works, and what creates it. Who can honestly say that something as so could engage their minds in creative thinking? It’d be pretty tiresome to have to read three supportive paragraphs on characterizing tonality. Essay # 3 on mother/ daughter relationships was a bit more focused on critically analyzing the actions of characters, however, it didn’t quite meet the standards of how and why these characters did such things. My ideas weren’t organized and the thesis was a little askew. Essay # 2 on boundaries was focused on two separate ideas simultaneously and hardly stuck to a main topic. I viewed it as being very uninteresting and unimproved from the full-breadth draft. As a solution to this hairy situation, I turned myself into turtle mode and rewrote “To be or not to be” (Essay #2).
Having been able to revive this parched essay, I feel that it is now a healthy, saturated, and improved work of art. Draft 1 is entirely boring and strikingly terse. First off, the title is mysteriously vague and the opening line can send people running in the opposite direction. Along side of that, my thesis tries to prove two points at the same time, which can be very mind-boggling and hard to follow. The rest of the essay reads decently, but is still considered cliché’ in my book. It just doesn’t grasp my attention long enough. Each draft following hardly makes any improvements, highly disregarding any peer review comments I may have received. All in all, I felt it necessary to make sizeable repairs to this poorly constructed mess. For starters, I re-read the poem and opened a completely new word document to use my creative blender. I figured that an experience that most people would have encountered might hit a homerun if I could relate it to the point I was trying to prove. Jumping into a pool or slowly inching in are two ways I had known to deal with the issue of adjusting to cold water. To me, they also represented two separate ways characters of the mill could deal with suicidal thoughts. As soon as that was laid on the table, I gobbled it up and devised an entirely new thesis. From there, everything seemed to flow so easily and smoothly referred to a pool-side experience throughout the course of the essay. I’d like to think of this as a creative piece of persuasive art. It is my best attempt at individual creativity that I have produced thus far.
Aside from essay inspiration, free writes, peer review comments, and response to pieces have contributed to a well-rounded knowledge of how to organize thought. Free writes seem to be my best development in the thought process. Writing down immediate thoughts usually provoke deeper, more insightful meaning to my first impression. My strongest free write, which appears to be “Girl,” begins as stating the obvious but further develops into a life realization of “parents who want to have control over you are simply trying to keep you in shape morally.” It clearly solidifies the thought process to any developing thesis. Ranked second, the free write on “Night Waitress” explains some of the common topics of literature found in the poem. It is also a baking thesis in the oven, however, isn’t frosted good enough for my liking. “The Lady in the Pink Mustang” free-write ranks third because it has lots of interesting insight but vaguely examines the character. Ranked fourth, is a lab exercise of change in person. I feel this is a strong representation of role reversal. I think I have demonstrated an honest perspective of a young girl being tormented by an angry doctor with scary doctor utensils.
The peer review comments I have submitted to other students don’t seem to encourage much improvement. The first one I have here, is the best of my suggestions. I have pointed out the strengths of Allie’s essay as well as what can be worked on. I expressed a decent portion of my opinion in hopes of lending the helping hand. The last two peer reviews hardly suggest any changes to be made. I simply state that the papers are acceptable in the present condition and that there is no room for improvement. That is where I am wrong. There is always going to be need for advancement, not only in writing, but also, in everything and anything we do.
Procrastination and conflict within the self, are a blend of topics that bake the cake called me, but I finally finished this, didn’t I? All in all, those aren’t very memorable characteristics; however, through sleepy eyes and impulsive decisions at the last minute, I have experienced a catharsis of mind. I have quenched my brain of all thirst because I’ve finally come to realize that an exerpt read is only completely understood after reading what lies outside the lines, and when the tortoise takes the lead.
I got an A in English, and i am totally psyched. All my paper grades were C's. I'm kind of hoping my final paper is what established my ultimate A.
Music is clearly acceptable due to my lack of attendance.
Child Psychology as well, but because i hardly studied.
The other two.. were pieces of cake because the professors were lenient.
AND..dont read any further. I'd just liek to keep this as a reference.
however, if you are itnerested, which i highly doubt, by all means go ahead...
Carissa Frazier 00759768
ENL 102
Mrs. Burt
May 15, 2006
Quenching a Thirsty Mind
“Close your eyes. Drift into a restful sleep. It’s perfectly simple.”
“NO! NO! NO! NO! NO! You can’t. and you must not! You have a final paper due tomorrow and you haven’t anything written!”
“Too bad, I can’t think of anything anyway.”
“Well…Get to it, you big loaf!”
“Ughhh…I guess it would be a good idea, but I really can not keep my eyes open.
There’s not enough time left to critically analyze pieces of paper containing words I’ve written a while ago. I can’t do it.”
“ Well then, just write about what you think. Write whatever strikes your mind right at this very moment!”
Title, where art thou? You may not know what to call this right away, but once you’ve read through the journey of an essay written, you will. You truly will. Please stay awake; you can do it. You’ve done it before, even if it wasn’t anything that could speak for your greatest strength, it was something. It spoke for, at least, a piece of you, quite possibly your conforming mind set at that time. You didn’t have anything better to write about so you simply wrote of what other people told you or what you already knew. You didn’t take the time to dig deeper and see that there was more to the text than words. Something called negative space (a term I learned from last semester as an art student) rings a bell and has come to be a popular term in the field of figuring out. Merely reading a text isn’t nearly enough to quench the thirst of a dehydrated mind. What really speaks between the lines are things such as: word choice, connotative meaning, reaction, mood, feeling, known experience of an author by research, or the time frame of a publishing.
In all reality, everything and anything can be thrown into the mixing bowl of inspiration that bakes an author’s cake. Up until recently, I hardly considered such aspects as contribution to the “big picture” meaning of the text. Ernest Hemingway clearly wrote about what he knew as himself and perfected that through impersonations in characters and people he has associated himself with as others. In Edwin Robinson’s “The Mill,” historical content is vital to comprehending the entirety of the poem. “There are no millers any more,” because of the industrial revolution and the replacing of humans with machines. Without knowing this, we wouldn’t have discovered the true meaning of the miller’s suicide. Other works, such as: “The Gift of Sweat” or “Orientation” are examples of experience driven spurs of literature. Everything and anything can have an impact on literature and vice versa.
As for myself, I can honestly say that the first three essays I have written are the essays I impulsively plunged into. Being a procrastinator of countless papers, school work, etc. I had little time to think of how to relate a text to something outside of its words. I, for one, am a very indecisive being. A few times, I start by writing whatever word plucks at my brain first. From there, I just elaborate. However, I start over, cross out, and stare blankly for minutes on end. Until finally, there is nothing left to do but to base my thoughts upon those of other students and “dive into the healing pool.” Class collaboration has only led me to believe that the persuasive arguments of others are well developed and easily accepted as excellent topics for papers. So goes, my conformity.
Individual creativity, on the other hand, awakened me late in the semester. I realized that being a turtle rather than a hare was a better way to attempt a paper in order to leave a lasting impression. I didn’t want to write papers just to get them out of the way and under my belt. I wanted to slowly but surely write to leave behind a piece of my own, opinionated self. After the fat draft of essay #4, I realized how little of an effort I put into figuring out what needed to make my paper purposeful. Every other paper I had read that wasn’t my own presented individuality and coherence behind a focused mind. The first two drafts I brought to class were but mere summaries of the text I had chosen to write about, with little outside information. My peer reviews suggested I do some serious revision, and it finally hit me that I was that horrible rabbit, racing through the fields.
With the will, I found the way to slow down and fix what had gone awry. I completely scratched what was left of my fat draft and researched and edited and applied every little thing I could into formulating a new and exciting paper. For some strange reason, I found it easy to connect a text with nature or experience, hopefully allowing my audience to easily engage themselves into where I was about to take them. I didn’t want my paper to be just another boring analysis of some story that nobody else got the chance to read. I wanted to lure interest by hooking the reader with a twisted opening line. From then on, I made it a point to commence excitement at the very beginning of the essay and sprinkle it throughout its entirety. The conclusion would serve to put the delightful cherry on top.
Looking over my first few papers, I couldn’t possibly select any as an elective essay due to the fact that they were all written in rabbit form. Essay #1 is all about shift in tone, how it works, and what creates it. Who can honestly say that something as so could engage their minds in creative thinking? It’d be pretty tiresome to have to read three supportive paragraphs on characterizing tonality. Essay # 3 on mother/ daughter relationships was a bit more focused on critically analyzing the actions of characters, however, it didn’t quite meet the standards of how and why these characters did such things. My ideas weren’t organized and the thesis was a little askew. Essay # 2 on boundaries was focused on two separate ideas simultaneously and hardly stuck to a main topic. I viewed it as being very uninteresting and unimproved from the full-breadth draft. As a solution to this hairy situation, I turned myself into turtle mode and rewrote “To be or not to be” (Essay #2).
Having been able to revive this parched essay, I feel that it is now a healthy, saturated, and improved work of art. Draft 1 is entirely boring and strikingly terse. First off, the title is mysteriously vague and the opening line can send people running in the opposite direction. Along side of that, my thesis tries to prove two points at the same time, which can be very mind-boggling and hard to follow. The rest of the essay reads decently, but is still considered cliché’ in my book. It just doesn’t grasp my attention long enough. Each draft following hardly makes any improvements, highly disregarding any peer review comments I may have received. All in all, I felt it necessary to make sizeable repairs to this poorly constructed mess. For starters, I re-read the poem and opened a completely new word document to use my creative blender. I figured that an experience that most people would have encountered might hit a homerun if I could relate it to the point I was trying to prove. Jumping into a pool or slowly inching in are two ways I had known to deal with the issue of adjusting to cold water. To me, they also represented two separate ways characters of the mill could deal with suicidal thoughts. As soon as that was laid on the table, I gobbled it up and devised an entirely new thesis. From there, everything seemed to flow so easily and smoothly referred to a pool-side experience throughout the course of the essay. I’d like to think of this as a creative piece of persuasive art. It is my best attempt at individual creativity that I have produced thus far.
Aside from essay inspiration, free writes, peer review comments, and response to pieces have contributed to a well-rounded knowledge of how to organize thought. Free writes seem to be my best development in the thought process. Writing down immediate thoughts usually provoke deeper, more insightful meaning to my first impression. My strongest free write, which appears to be “Girl,” begins as stating the obvious but further develops into a life realization of “parents who want to have control over you are simply trying to keep you in shape morally.” It clearly solidifies the thought process to any developing thesis. Ranked second, the free write on “Night Waitress” explains some of the common topics of literature found in the poem. It is also a baking thesis in the oven, however, isn’t frosted good enough for my liking. “The Lady in the Pink Mustang” free-write ranks third because it has lots of interesting insight but vaguely examines the character. Ranked fourth, is a lab exercise of change in person. I feel this is a strong representation of role reversal. I think I have demonstrated an honest perspective of a young girl being tormented by an angry doctor with scary doctor utensils.
The peer review comments I have submitted to other students don’t seem to encourage much improvement. The first one I have here, is the best of my suggestions. I have pointed out the strengths of Allie’s essay as well as what can be worked on. I expressed a decent portion of my opinion in hopes of lending the helping hand. The last two peer reviews hardly suggest any changes to be made. I simply state that the papers are acceptable in the present condition and that there is no room for improvement. That is where I am wrong. There is always going to be need for advancement, not only in writing, but also, in everything and anything we do.
Procrastination and conflict within the self, are a blend of topics that bake the cake called me, but I finally finished this, didn’t I? All in all, those aren’t very memorable characteristics; however, through sleepy eyes and impulsive decisions at the last minute, I have experienced a catharsis of mind. I have quenched my brain of all thirst because I’ve finally come to realize that an exerpt read is only completely understood after reading what lies outside the lines, and when the tortoise takes the lead.