1. You didn't actually put a link to this fic in the comm when you posted! I clicked on your user name to come here. You might want to correct that.
2. Your ficlet is good. Your writing style I like and there is a lot of emotion and need between the boys that comes across, Dean's vulnerability too. So your writing is good. But your punctuation is not, sorry. A beta would sort that really quickly, and I think if the mistakes were pointed out to you once you'd be fine the next time you write something (which I hope you do). If you like I can do that and email it to you, I'll be gentle I promise! I like this fic and I think it would be a pity if people didn't read it because of a technical problem and some people are like that.)
2.Thank you. Punctuation? What's that? ;) I think I will look for a beta (if I can't find someone willing to do the dirty work I just come back to you and BEG you) but last night I just wanted to post it before I freaked out soo.... My e-mail is weltea@gmx.de,it would be really nice IF you WANT to point out all my mistakes,but you don't have to. 3.Thanks for being so helpful
It was good. You need to leave space between your sentences it makes it easier for old tired eyes like mine to read and the fake cut thing is on the page where you post. Move your cursor over the icons there are two that kind of look like paper.
First you want to highlight everything you want to hide under the cut and then find the icon that says lj cut and click it. It will say read more but you can type your own message there like this way to the story or come to my journal or whatever.
Hoped that helped. I was totally useless when I started and kind people have helped me along the way.
Dean is so very damaged that he has a very hard time believing that he's worth it.
Thanks. I'll leave space next time,whenever I write in OpenOffice it tells me that too :). YES! I know how how to do that lj cut. Thank You!!! And Dean,I watched the Season One Finale yesterday afternoon so that's where that came from. I think I probably just had to get that out of my system, before I just couldn't fall asleep. Guess I was really affected by it.
ho there! i loved it! i guess most critics and what a beta could to was already being said so no need to repeat ;) great idea to post it in the wincest comunity otherwise i would have missed this and that'd be a shame!!! so no worries about being new on lj and all, you already got help and i hope you get along eventually. (I haven't worked out much yet XD ) please continue writing because this was awesome and i hope there's more to come!!! :D
Advise wise, I can't say anything that hasn't been said before. I will, however, say, that you have a great talent in capturing the moment, in capturing the emotion of it all. I liked it. Well done, and keep at it!
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2. Your ficlet is good. Your writing style I like and there is a lot of emotion and need between the boys that comes across, Dean's vulnerability too. So your writing is good. But your punctuation is not, sorry. A beta would sort that really quickly, and I think if the mistakes were pointed out to you once you'd be fine the next time you write something (which I hope you do). If you like I can do that and email it to you, I'll be gentle I promise! I like this fic and I think it would be a pity if people didn't read it because of a technical problem and some people are like that.)
Well done on a first fic!
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2.Thank you.
Punctuation? What's that? ;)
I think I will look for a beta (if I can't find someone
willing to do the dirty work I just come back to you and
BEG you) but last night I just wanted to post it before
I freaked out soo....
My e-mail is weltea@gmx.de,it would be really nice IF
you WANT to point out all my mistakes,but you don't have
to.
3.Thanks for being so helpful
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First you want to highlight everything you want to hide under the cut and then find the icon that says lj cut and click it. It will say read more but you can type your own message there like this way to the story or come to my journal or whatever.
Hoped that helped. I was totally useless when I started and kind people have helped me along the way.
Dean is so very damaged that he has a very hard time believing that he's worth it.
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YES! I know how how to do that lj cut. Thank You!!!
And Dean,I watched the Season One Finale yesterday afternoon so that's where that came from. I think I probably just had to get that out of my system, before I just couldn't fall asleep. Guess I was really affected by it.
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Listen to the other posters, though. It would be easier to read with spaces.
Thank you,
Alley
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I will next time :)
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i loved it! i guess most critics and what a beta could to was already being said so no need to repeat ;)
great idea to post it in the wincest comunity otherwise i would have missed this and that'd be a shame!!!
so no worries about being new on lj and all, you already got help and i hope you get along eventually. (I haven't worked out much yet XD )
please continue writing because this was awesome and i hope there's more to come!!! :D
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