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melyanna in west_gate

Fic: The Zebra Problem

Mar 20, 2007 23:22

Title: The Zebra Problem
Author: Melyanna
Pairings: Ellie/Lorne, John/Elizabeth
Summary: Rule number one is that people die. Rule number two is that doctors can't change rule number one.
Notes: This one came from a viewing of West Wing's "Ellie" and way too much Scrubs.

( The Zebra Problem )

Comments 8

calleigh_j March 21 2007, 08:54:53 UTC

God, poor Eric, poor Ellie - poor everyone. Absolutely adored all the John/Ellie interaction, and obviously the Lorne/Ellie stuff as well. Zelenka/Heightmeyer? Made of some serious awesome. Great fic, despite (or because of, maybe) the serious depression factor. Cool title too.

angelqueen04 March 21 2007, 12:58:41 UTC

How sad. :( This is just heartbreaking, and you portrayed that wonderfully. Excellent work! Ellie's pain at not being able to do more to save Eric, her lashing out at the diagnostics team, and catching a glimpse at how Eric spent his last days was beautifully written. Loved it. And that bit at the end where John brought Siah to give Ellie a hug was a great touch.

And the little bit about Radek and Kate was so cool. Careful, or you're going to end up converting me to another crack!ship.

Fantastic job! :)

miera_c March 21 2007, 13:00:20 UTC

*curls into a ball*

Why do I always feel like I could read an entire novel about this character who had barely any genuine development in the entire 7 seasons of the show?

miera_c March 21 2007, 15:05:15 UTC

also this:

“It looks more like you’re a little depressed. I’m no expert, but wait, I am.”

was brilliant. :)

westingturtle March 21 2007, 21:24:06 UTC

crying, crying a little. Oddly enough, the moment that broke me was:

a small person with John Sheppard’s wild black hair had toddled into the lab

lovely, lovely job.

sache8 March 21 2007, 23:56:12 UTC

This is very pathetic, but I know you'll understand and forgive me. My favorite part was Siah's overalls. ;-)

As I was working through my stressful and tedious day, this fic as a WIP flitted through my mind briefly, and it occurred to me that through what I read last night, the "zebra" thing hadn't been explained. I remembered it from when you explained it to me a long time ago, but the scene between Ellie and the diagnostics team never does. I'm glad it came out later. I kind of figured it would.

"dying inch by inch" is a good phrase.